Reply To: In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them? Reply To: In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

February 7, 2020 at 11:34 pm

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  1. About 50% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. More than 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert them into their active counterparts.

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