Reply To: Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.

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February 18, 2020 at 10:30 pm

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(It is true that )[ redundant ] many people suggest that children should learn foreign languages at primary school. Although this suggestion (indeed) [ redundant] has some benefits in the schooling of children [redundant ] , I believe its drawbacks would outweigh the merits.

People might agree with two main reasons why studying foreign languages at primary school could benefit students. On the one hand, investigations show that primary school education is the best period of language learning [redundant ] from the perspective of [redundant ]brain development. Languages learning [ repetition]in this period can also help young students enhance the ability to logical thinking and motivate curiosity about other cultures[ wordy]. On the other hand, children who study earlier can establish a strong foundation of vocabulary and grammar, and prepare [grammatical error ]them for further language learning.

However, I agree with those who believe that students should start foreign language learning at secondary school. Because students at primary school are too young to focus on language learning[ repetition]. The [ article error]bilingual study would take up children’s playtime and possibly make them tired about school and course. Furthermore, I believe that[redundant ] secondary students would be more able to find both accessible and efficient strategies to learn a new language. For example, they have opportunities to travel to western countries and interact with native speakers in-depth[wrong word ], which could help them improve oral English. These students can browse websites to practice foreign reading as well. All of these approaches seem more available to older children than younger ones. Last but not least, secondary students (have an adequate perception of ) [wordy ]what languages they truly [redundant ]love instead of being forced to accept their parents’ choices.

In conclusion, I can [ redundant]understand the opinion that parents might want their children to win at the starting line. I still believe taking an early language studying would not be the best choice for children.

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