Reply To: Some people believe famous people’s support for international aid organizations draws attention to problems. Others think celebrities make the problem less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing Some people believe famous people’s support for international aid organizations draws attention to problems. Others think celebrities make the problem less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Reply To: Some people believe famous people’s support for international aid organizations draws attention to problems. Others think celebrities make the problem less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

February 20, 2020 at 8:00 pm

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Issues:

  1. Nearly 70% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. More than 30% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

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