Reply To: Some people believe the best way to produce a better society is to ensure there is only a small difference between the earnings of the richest and the poorest. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing Some people believe the best way to produce a better society is to ensure there is only a small difference between the earnings of the richest and the poorest. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Reply To: Some people believe the best way to produce a better society is to ensure there is only a small difference between the earnings of the richest and the poorest. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

February 20, 2020 at 8:37 pm

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Issues:

  1. 100% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. More than 50% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

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