Reply To: Some people think that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters such as food, clothes and entertainment is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decision about matters that affect them.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing Some people think that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters such as food, clothes and entertainment is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decision about matters that affect them. Reply To: Some people think that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters such as food, clothes and entertainment is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decision about matters that affect them.

February 22, 2020 at 10:34 pm

Score: 54.6

Issues:

  1. About 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 30% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

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