Reply To: The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981,1991 and 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make some comparisons where relevant.

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February 26, 2020 at 5:20 pm

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The pie charts compare the [ article error ] school expenditure variation [word form error  ] of a UK school in (the years) [ redundant ] 1981, 1991 and 2001, respectively.

(It is noticeable [ wrong word ] that) [ redundant ] salaries accounted for the highest proportion [ logical incompleteness ] in the three years, constituting 68%, 72% and 60% [ punctuation error ] respectively. Around 45% of the school budgets [word form error  ] went on [ wrong preposition ] teachers’ pay, [punctuation error  ]roughly 22% went to other workers’ incomes [word form error  ] [ rephrase ]. While spending on insurance rose. [ grammatical error ]

Teachers’ pay stood at 50% of total cost in 1991 and ending [ grammatical error ] at 45% in 2001. In 1981, a [article error  ] UK school spent 28% of their [pronoun error  ] money on other workers’ salaries, [punctuation error  ]by 2001, expenditure on other workers’ incomes had fallen by 13%. By contrast, we saw an increase in expenses [word form error  ] for insurance for a [ article error ] Uk school, from 2% to 8% in the UK.

Expenditure on resources had increased to 20% by 1991 before decreasing to only 9 % by the end of the period. In contrast, the opposite trend can be seen when we look at furniture cost and equipment cost, [ punctuation error ]this cost dipped to only 5% of [article error  ] total expenditure in 1991 but rose to 23% in 2001.