Reply To: At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages? Reply To: At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

February 26, 2020 at 9:47 pm

Score: 55.8

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  1. More than 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. More than 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

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