Consumers are faced with an increasing number of advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think are consumers influenced by advertisements? What measures can be taken to protect them?

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing Consumers are faced with an increasing number of advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think are consumers influenced by advertisements? What measures can be taken to protect them? Consumers are faced with an increasing number of advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think are consumers influenced by advertisements? What measures can be taken to protect them?

March 3, 2020 at 8:53 pm

Score: 62.2

It is the fact that a vast number of adverts appear in our modern market[  unclear word]. I would argue that the trend has a negative development for our society, and governments, as well as audiences, should take steps to address this issue.

One of the adverse impacts on consumers is commercials will manipulate them[unclear pronoun/impacts or consumers?  ]. First of all, intensive adverts with brand images always use glamorous celebrities to promote products. Hence, people always be encouraged[ passive ] to follow the latest trend by spending more money. In this way, it[ unclear pronoun ] leads to excessive consumption. Secondly, commercials aimed at children without critical thinking [ unclear/commercials?children? businesses? ]will lead into [ incorrect preposition ]misbehaviors. Fast foods, for example, exaggerate their[ logical confusion ] yummy taste and ignore the risk to health[ unclear ]. [lack connection  ]Children are more likely to copy this misbehaviors[ word form ] and be prone [ unparalleled comparison/copy-be prone ]to health issues like obesity or diabetes.

Advertisements do need some forms of regulation[logical confusion  ]. [ lack connection ] Governments ought to censor commercials with false information[ unclear ] or products that are harmful[wordy  ]. Also, some target young audiences should be even banned[ confused ]. Meanwhile, unhealthy goods like[ informal ] cigarettes and alcohol should display [ logical confusion ]warnings on their [ logical confusion ]packets. However, not only do governments make regulations but also people need to take steps[logical incompleteness  ]. Consumers ought to use their common sense when they go to the shops and ask themselves whether they really need to make that purchase.

In sum, various measures can tackle the problems that are certain to arise as the increasing number of adverts appear in the market.