Reply To: In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Does this trend have positive or negative effects on the society?

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March 9, 2020 at 3:21 pm

Score: 36.2

Issues:

  1. More than 60% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 30% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

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