Reply To: People aim to achieve the balance between their work and lives. But few people achieve it. What are the causes of the problems? How to overcome it?

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing People aim to achieve the balance between their work and lives. But few people achieve it. What are the causes of the problems? How to overcome it? Reply To: People aim to achieve the balance between their work and lives. But few people achieve it. What are the causes of the problems? How to overcome it?

March 16, 2020 at 6:48 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert them into their active counterparts.

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