Reply To: Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents.

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March 20, 2020 at 1:08 am

Score: 61.1

Issues:

  1. About 50% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 40% of the sentences are passive. Convert them into their active counterparts.

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