Reply To: Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion. Reply To: Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

March 21, 2020 at 11:52 pm

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I take the view [ wordy] that not only history but also other subjects are necessary for us to learn. [ logically disconnected from the prior sentence]Nowadays, students should be absorbed in all kinds of knowledge and form the basis of life[unclear ]. Science and technology are the new and original aspects at present[unclear ]. However, history is one of the significant subjects to reflect the problem[ unclear- what problem?].

History is like our root[this makes no sense in English ]. If we have an unstable connection with it that we cannot have adequate nutrition[make no sense ]. The essential events which happened in the past can have a profound effect on one country. Besides, people should keep in mind the bitter experience[ unclear] so that they can avoid making similarly [word form error ]mistake. Meanwhile, history can give aid to[ wordy] us to achieve some aims[ unclear]. Probably, it[unclear pronoun ] seems out of touch with the present. Once we reject it[unclear pronoun ] that we may not reach an expectation [ grammatical error]development.

Furthermore, science and technology play a significant role from beginning to end[logical incompleteness ]. As for countries, which are the earthshaking sign toward the nations[ unclear]. For us, they[unclear pronoun ] can expand our horizon[ word form error] as well as develop our strengths. At present, state operation and social development both want to get their support[ unclear]. [disconnected from the prior sentence ]It is a wise decision for students to study science and technology. [ choppy sentence]That’s because their roots becoming stronger with extra supplementary which will promote their growth[grammatical error/unclear ].

In general, three of them[ unclear pronoun] have an intimate connection that we cannot ignore anyone[grammatical error  ]. If we cannot do that our country may develop incompletely[grammatical error ]. History often assigned to an obscure role which we hardly see it work[unclear ]. Although I cannot have a positive attitude to it because of depressing[unclear ]. Moreover, the experience of governing a country was ancients paid for their life to proven[unclear ]. We may respect them[unclear pronoun].