Reply To: A course of study that has no direct employment opportunities serves no purpose.

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March 25, 2020 at 3:05 pm

Score: 46.7

Issues:

  1. More than 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. More than 30% of the sentences are passive. Convert them into their active counterparts.

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