怎样写Molecular and Cell Biology 套磁信

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  • cai
    University: GuangDong Medical University
    Nationality: China
    July 23, 2019 at 10:54 am

    怎样写Molecular and Cell Biology 套磁信

    Dear Prof. XXX,

    I am Ziqing Cai, a senior undergraduate student from Guangdong Medical University, having worked in Prof. XX’s group on the role of gap junction in drug-induced liver injury, capture mechanism of circulating tumor cells and application of Micro/Nano hierarchical structures.

    I have been joining research work for four years till now and I have mastered some experimental technique including cell culture, flow cytometry, molecular and cell biology, protein, and lipid techniques (WB, PCR, ELISA, HPLC), mouse models. The first time I saw your publication was during I finishing my second paper about Effects of gap junction intercellular communication on the docetaxel-induced cytotoxicity in rat hepatocytes, and I got fantastic guidance from your clear illustrations. With the passion for cancer therapy, currently, I worked on hierarchical surfaces modification that focuses on the mechanism of capturing circulating tumor cells, and paper about that has just accepted. I think what you are conducting really useful in the clinic with a broad prospect, and that is what I need to improve in my future researching life.

    I believe that my experience might bring some innovative ideas to the projects you are conducting. May I have a chance to meet you and discuss your research? I really look forward to joining your team and get PhD education.

    My detailed CV is enclosed in this email, and I sincerely hope that you can draw a little time to know more about me.

    Thanks a lot for your attention. I am looking forward to hearing from you.
    Best regards!
    Yours sincerely,
    Ziqing Cai

     
    Lin Qiu
    July 25, 2019 at 8:03 pm

    Score: 53.2

    Suggestions for Improvement

    • Shorten/split sentences exceeding 20 words;
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    • Letter should be shortened.

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    I have been joining research work for four years till now and During my research work, I have mastered some extensive experimental techniques including cell culture, flow cytometry, molecular and cell biology, protein, and lipid techniques (WB, PCR, ELISA, HPLC), and mouse models.

    The first time I saw your publication was during I finishing When I prepared my second paper about (Effects of gap junction intercellular communication on the docetaxel-induced cytotoxicity in rat hepatocytes)[ upper letter needed for all concrete words ], and I read your paper and became impressed about got fantastic guidance from your clear illustrations in your paper entitled….

    With the passion for cancer therapy, currently, I worked on hierarchical surfaces modification that focuses on the mechanism of capturing circulating tumor cells, and my paper about that on this topic has just been accepted. I think what you are conducting really useful in the clinic with a broad prospect, and that is what I need to improve in my future researching life.

    I believe that my experience might bring some innovative ideas to the projects you are conducting. May I have a chance to meet you and discuss your research? I really As such, I look forward to joining your team for potential doctoral studies and get PhD education.

    Please check my enclosed CV for further information. 

    My detailed CV is enclosed in this email, and I sincerely hope that you can draw a little time to know more about me.

    Thanks a lot for your attention. I am looking forward to hearing from you.

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    Lin Qiu
    August 19, 2019 at 4:06 pm

    Let me know should you have more questions regarding early decision.