留学DIY申请面试(interview)套词信

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    Anonymous
    March 16, 2019 at 2:55 pm

    留学DIY申请面试(interview)套词信

    老师好,

    我申请的是今年秋天美国master。事情是这个样子的,就是我前几天跟committee发了邮件,问他们能不能给我一个interview的机会,因为大家好像都有了,但我没有收到任何消息,邮件内容是这样的:

    Dear Committee,

    My name is … and I have applied for the … program. I hope this email finds you well! I am writing this email to ask for some information about my application situation. Since I haven’t heard anything from you in a while, I am reaching out to share with you some of my recent progress and I am hoping for an interview chance to talk more about it.

    I have been working on my graduation design, which is about building a movie box office prediction model using Python and Tensorflow. First, I used Selenium to control Firefox and built a python-scrawler to get thousands of movie information on Rotten Tomato. Afterwards I cleaned data, turning it into a matrix as the input for the neural network model. I also designed a comprehensive and novel evaluation plan to test model’s accuracy, robustness, superiority and expandability. What is creative about my paper is that I added in critics review as well as competition factor to see their predictive ability for the box office, which has never been done in any previous paper. From this whole process of data processing and modeling, I’ve deepened my understanding of … and confirmed my passion for this field. Furthermore, I’ve learned that though skills are important in solving a problem, curiosity and critical thinking are what make a solution outstanding. For curiosity sparks creativity, and critical thinking brings scientificity. With these characteristics, my model performed excellent, and was endorsed by my mentor for publication. Apart from that, I am also actively taking online Natural Language Processing courses and learning signal processing algorithm in my spare time, as my internship involves running ASR model in Kaldi.

    These accomplishments made me more confident in the competitiveness of my application and in my ability to accomplish this master program with distinction. I’d love to discuss about it and hope you could give me this chance.

    I appreciate your time for reading this!

    Best regards,

    然后学校的回复是这样的:

    We are happy to hear that you have submitted an application to the … program at … University.

    Thank you for the update. Unfortunately, we are unable to accommodate requests to submit application materials or make changes to current applications after the deadline, as the review process is currently underway. We would not be able to add this to an already submitted application but it will remain archived. If our admissions review committee has any questions about your application materials, we will reach out to you directly. All decisions will be announced around …..

    I hope this helps but please contact us if you have any additional questions. Good luck!

    结果收到他们的回复之后的一天,decision就发放了,然后我就在waitlist上面了。
    我现在打算这样给他们回话:

    Dear Committee,

    First of all, I want to thank you for putting me on the waitlist, I am very happy to know that I still have a chance of getting into my dream program. Also, I really hope that you could consider giving me an interview chance.

    As I have mentioned in my previous letter, I am recently working on my graduate design and internship as well as finishing rest of the courses of my minor. Learning new things and making progress everyday makes me feel happy. Also, I got a 4.0 GPA for the last semester (fall 2018), which made me more confident of my multitasking capability, which was handling a heavy courseload, intership, standard exams and graduate school application at the same time.

    It is my desperate wish of getting into this program, and I really hope that you could give me an interview chance to show you more about me.

    Best regards,

    十分感谢老师帮我修改!!!

    March 19, 2019 at 1:53 am

    Hi,

    Your first letter to the Department is useless, and perhaps the recipient didn’t read through your letter. It appears from the response that the person who received and read your letter is the one who does administrative work. He/she is probably ignorant of the machine learning stuff you talked about.

    You should have sent the letter to a specific professor whose research work relates to yours, or to the decision-maker who might be interested in your initiative and thus refer you to his/her colleague. However, it is now too late to do this since you already received the waitlist decision.

    I will polish your 2nd letter and send it to you in private.

    Regards,

    Lin Qiu

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    Anonymous
    March 19, 2019 at 2:18 am

    Thank you so much!~ That helps a lot!  🙂

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