A university education should always include an internship or some type of work experience. 

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  • jjg
    University: university of wisconsin Milwaukee
    Nationality: japan
    November 13, 2019 at 8:52 pm

    TOEFL Writing Topic: A university education should always include an internship or some type of work experience. 

    Academic learning from university do benefit young people by building up their basic knowledge system on the industry. However, theories are only the structure of an industry, experience and useful skills are needed to form up the whole industry. Therefore, internship and work experience are necessary in university education.

    Knowledge from textbooks may be too old for the industry. Due to the features of the internet, tons of ideas and experience are sharing within the industry which makes the knowledge in books may become out of fashion anytime. If students only sitting in the classrooms and reading words in text books they will never know about the reality situation of the industry. At the end, what they have learned from university may not help them fit in their future work.

    Even though theories from academic world is the latest knowledge, it may not be able to achieve in the industry. As we all know, from ideal to reality is a long process. An idea from a specialist need to be test and modify many times before it can be used by the popularity. Which means that what students learn from the latest academic world may not achieve the requirements to be used in the real world. Hence, an internship or work experience are the bridge between theories and useful skills.

    Last but not least, some people may think that working is the mission after university and is not proper to put in the university times. Actually, working during university time is not a waste of times. Internship is a period of time for students to prepare for their future career. During this time, they may know more about the specific job they want to divide in the future and spend more time on building up the skills that the job may need. If students do not prepare well before a full-time job they may need to spend more on working to achieve the assignments and have a huge pressure.

    Above all, internship or work experience is one of the beneficial ways for students to learn during university time.

    November 14, 2019 at 4:14 am

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