All university students should be required to take history courses no matter what their field of study is. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Whether history classes [courses  ]should be compulsory in universities (has been raging for some time.)[ unclear ] Some claim that it is essential for all students to learn about the culture of their countries [by matriculating in history coursework  ]. Theoretically, there is no better way to achieve this goal than [to  ]take history lessons. However, I am afraid I cannot share this point of view.

Admittedly, learning history is of great importance to students’ well-rounded development. But we have to admit that most undergraduates received/[completed  ] history- related education[some history coursework  ] when they studied in junior and high school. [The goal of undergraduate education, however,  ]The prerequisite of being undergraduates is that they have grasped [  is to grasp]versatile knowledge, [ in addition to depth study in a specialized field ]and it is time for them to opt for a field appealing to them. Under such circumstances, [Therefore,  ]dedicating so much time[to history learning as a university student  ] is undoubtedly not meaningful and helpful. [  In terms of fulfilling personal interest, I am of the opinion that students can ]Instead, they can continue learning history by participating [ participate ]in optional [ elective or online ]courses [in history.  ] or searching on the Internet if interested. So taking history lessons is not indispensable for undergraduates whose majors are not history.

Typically,[Additionally,  ] students are busy with their compulsory [the  ]assignments [ in relation to compulsory courses. ], and because of this, history classes seem to be a waste of time.[ factual error ] My own life can be a convincing example to illustrate it. [ For example, ]I am a junior[ and I ] undergraduate, major in Mechanical Engineering. Since my classes are extremely hard[/difficult/challenging  ], I have to spend much [ significant amounts of ] time reading textbooks and performing [engineering-related calculations.  ] calculation carefully. [As such,  ] I cannot imagine how I could/ [would be able to  ] allocate [ a big portion of ] my time [ to any ] if there are lots of history lessons to take. Not surprisingly, such a policy would make students suffer from much more stress.

Having considered all these arguments, [ In light of the reasons noted above, ] the statement that all college students should take history courses is totally untenable. And an alternative is regarding these [I argue that we should regard history  ] classes as elective [ ones, which caters to only interested students.  ] courses so that people interested in history can take these lessons.