Although more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news.
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January 8, 2020 at 6:57 am
Task 2: Although more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news.
Advanced Technology has bring about some convenience in people’s daily life in recent years.Reading news online or from the newspaper has been a topic which people argue with.To state my opinion,even though getting up-to-date Knowledge online is a convenient way for people to read,Most of them still buy newspapers in personal life.
More and more people want to read news online for convenience.First of all,some people,
Especially those people who are very busy,they can stay at home to acquire news about policys,terriorists,economy from the computer and cell phone rather than consuming them time and energy to buy newspapers the kiosk. Furthormore,some electric devises are very portable for people to read everywhere and everytime.they can gain access to know the world only by Internet.
It is undeniable to say that if people spend excessive time staring at screen on electronic stuff,this way of reading would impair people’s vision.However,there is an another way for people to attain the knowledge,which is newspaper.
The newspaper has been used for a long time by the elders in comparison to Internet news.Some people remain to acquire news from newspaper because its reliable and directive.The newspapers can be used everywhere as same as the Internet.for instance,The whole global news on papers without any advertisement are all truly for newspaper buff to read.They can read the original news from the press as well.However,while some older people who wear glasses read news from Internet,small font size and impairing vision would be unconvience for them to read news.May be that is the main reason why more and more people especially the elders want to read newspapers to get brand-new knowledge.
In conclusion,a majority of people would rather choose the original way such as newspaper to get news comparing with Internet.
January 15, 2020 at 4:04 pmScore: 26.6
Problems:
- More than 70% of the sentences contain 20+ words. Shorten/split them.
- About 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert them into their active counterparts.
I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.
January 16, 2020 at 9:43 amAdvanced Technology has brought about some convenience in people’s daily life in recent years. People are all arguing over the origin of reading news. To state my opinion, even though getting up-to-date knowledge online is a convenient way for people to read, most of them still buy newspapers in personal life.
More and more people want to read news online for convenience. First of all, some people,
Especially those people who are very busy, they can stay at home to acquire news about policies,terrorists, the economy from the computer and cell phone rather than consuming their time and energy to buy newspapers from the kiosk. Furthermore, some electronic equipments are very portable for people to read everywhere and anytime. they can gain access to know the world only by the Internet.
It is undeniable to say that if people spend excessive time staring at the screen on electronic stuff, this way of reading will impair people’s vision. However, there is another ways for people to attain knowledge, which is the newspaper.
The newspaper has been used for a long time by the elders in comparison to Internet news. Some people remain to acquire information from the newspaper because its reliable and directive.The newspapers can be used everywhere as same as the Internet.for instance,The whole global news on papers without any advertisement are all truly for newspaper buff to read.They can read the original news from the press as well.However,while some older people who wear glasses read news from Internet,small font size and impairing vision would be unconvience for them to read news.May be that is the main reason why more and more people especially the elders want to read newspapers to get brand-new knowledge.
In conclusion,a majority of people would rather choose the original way such as newspaper to get news comparing with Internet.
January 16, 2020 at 5:15 pmScore: 50.3
Issues:
- More than 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
I will get back to you with a detailed revision.
