Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people.

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  • Neil
    University: SUSTech
    Nationality: China
    May 31, 2020 at 3:27 am

    Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people.

    Again and again, we are asked to be honest by parents and teachers in our childhood. They want us to tell every detailed thing happened in school. However, it is uncomfortable and embarrassed that we always feel about to this requirement. I would say telling truth is a good quality only under certain circumstance and could be harmful to your relationship.

    During a war, the most important thing in a commander’s mind is never to tell any truth to your enemies. Keeping secrets is keeping advantages. An unconscious leak of an attacking plan could lead to a disaster where all your solders are trapped, crying and blooding helplessly. Next, imagine you were an engineer at a company. One day someone came up and asked how you had achieved so many awesome products. Although you may feel good to be admired, you can not tell the truth. In a relationship such as competition or war, secrets are advantages and telling the truth is giving up your success. Then it is not a shame to be a liar because you have your very reason to keep silence, for your country or company.

    Another factor one should consider is whether it is a good time before one tells something. When you are preparing a surprise party for your best friend’s birthday, you may not want him or her know it until last second. So when he or she was asking your plan this weekends you have to pretend to be not aware of when the birthday is and quickly start another topic. You told a lie not because you want to do something harmful. Keeping secrets is keeping surprises. More interesting and more exciting our life could be with surprises. Your friend may feel disappointed and bored to hear you telling each detailed step in your birthday plan.

    June 4, 2020 at 12:46 am

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. About 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
    2. Numerous grammatical errors. [Pay close heed to tense.]
    3. Most sentences start with the word IT is redundant. Remove it and rewrite the sentence. I.E. it is uncomfortable and embarrassed that we always feel about to this requirement. – We feel uncomfortable and even embarrassed about this requirement.
    4. Avoid shift of person (we; you; etc.).

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    Neil
    University: SUSTech
    Nationality: China
    June 9, 2020 at 9:27 am

    Again and again, parents and teachers asked you to be honest in childhood. They want you to tell everything happens in school. However, people feel uncomfortable and even embarrassed about this requirement. Instead of a good quality, telling truth could be harmful under certain conditions, so everyone needs to treat it very carefully.

    During a war, the most important thing in a commander’s mind is never to tell any truth to your enemies. Keeping secrets is keeping advantages. Telling truth to enemies about an attacking plan could lead to a disaster, where all your soldiers were trapped, crying and blooding helplessly. Next, imagine you were an engineer at a company. One day someone came up and asked how you had achieved so many awesome products. Although you may feel good to be admired, you cannot tell the truth. In a relationship such as competition or war, secrets are advantages, hence telling the truth is giving up your success. Being a liar is not a shame because you have your very reason to keep silence, for your country or company.

    In addition, one should consider a proper time to say a truth. A good time is important and even crucial. When you were preparing a surprise party for your brother next Sunday, you would not want him to know anything about it in advance. He may ask your plan that day. In that case, you were in trouble. Telling the truth would ruin all your effort on this surprise party, doesn’t it? A lie could save everything. You told a lie not for something harmful. Keeping secrets is keeping surprises. Your brother may feel disappointed after hearing your detailed truth. More interesting and more exciting our life could be with surprises. Do not hesitate to be a liar if necessary.

    June 9, 2020 at 8:55 pm

    Score: 75.2

    Again and again, parents and teachers asked you to be honest in childhood. They want you to tell everything happens [ grammatical error ]in school. However, people [shift of person/ you-people  ]feel uncomfortable and even embarrassed about this requirement. Instead of a good quality[logically confusing  ], telling truth could be harmful under certain conditions, so everyone needs to treat it[ unclear pronoun ] very carefully.

    During a war, the most important [ absolute statement ]thing in a commander’s mind is never to tell any truth to your enemies. Keeping secrets is keeping advantages[unclear  ]. Telling truth to enemies about an attacking plan could lead to a disaster, where all your soldiers were trapped, crying and blooding helplessly. Next, imagine you were an engineer at a company. One day someone came up and asked how you had (achieved so many awesome products)[ unclear ]. Although you may feel good to be admired, you cannot tell the truth. In a relationship such as competition or war, secrets are advantages, [ punctuation error ]hence telling the truth is giving up your success. Being a liar is not a shame because you have your very reason to keep silence, for your country or company.

    In addition, one should consider a proper time to say a [ article error ]truth. A good time timing is important and even crucial. When you were preparing a surprise party for your brother next Sunday, you would not want him to know anything about it in advance. He may ask your plan that day. In that case, you were in trouble.[unclear  ] Telling the truth would ruin all your effort on this surprise party, doesn’t it? A lie could save everything. You told a lie not for something harmful. Keeping secrets is keeping surprises[ unclear ]. Your brother may feel disappointed after hearing your detailed truth. More interesting and more exciting our life could be with surprises. Do not hesitate to be a liar if necessary.