IELTS TASK1 Annual spending by UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

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  • paggy123
    University: wenjing college
    Nationality: China
    March 22, 2020 at 2:13 pm

    IELTS TASK1 Annual spending by UK school in 1981,1991 and 2001.

    As is demonstrate in these three pie chart, the annual expenses of a specific British school had changed in 1981, 1991, and 2001.

    According to the pie chart,other workers’ salaries decreased evenly during the three decade years. In 1981, one third of the expense on other workers’ salaries shared by school whilst 22% in 1991, and in 2001 it decrease to 15%.In contract,It can be seen from the pie chart the expenditure in insurance increased from 2% to 8%.

    Comparatively, other expenses had a noncontinuous change in total. Teachers’ salaries covered 40% in 1981, and increased to a half in 1991 but in 2001 the percentage decrease to 45%. There was a significant decrease in furniture and equipment from 15% to 5%, however it ascended by 18% in 2001. The three decade years witnessed the resource in school grow 5% percentage from 1981 to 1991, and then slided to 9%.

    Overall, teachers’ salaries took up the biggest proportion whilst the insurance coverd the smallest percentage whatever changed during three decades.

    March 27, 2020 at 12:12 am

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. About 50% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. About 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

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    paggy123
    University: wenjing college
    Nationality: China
    March 27, 2020 at 11:31 am

    As is show in these three pie charts, the annual expenses of a specific British school had changed in 1981, 1991, and 2001.

    According to the pie chart, other workers’ wages kept falling during the three decades. In 1981, one-third of the expense on other workers’ wages shared by school, 22% in 1991, 15% in 2001. In contrast, expenditure on insurance increased from 2% to 8%.

    Comparatively, other expenses had a noncontinuous change in total. Teachers’ salaries covered 40% in 1981, increased to a half in 1991 but in 2001 the percentage decrease to 45%. There was a significant decrease in furniture and equipment from 15% to 5%, but it ascended by 18% in 2001. In the period of three decades, the resource in school grew 5% from 1981 to 1991, and then slid to 9%.

    Overall, teachers’ salaries took up the largest proportion meanwhile the insurance covered the smallest percentage no matter how it changed during three decades.

    April 4, 2020 at 2:25 am

    Score: ungraded

    As is show [word form error ] in these three pie charts, the annual expenses of a specific British school had changed[tense error  ] in 1981, 1991, and 2001, respectively.

    According to the pie chart, other workers’ wages kept falling during the three decades[infomation introduced without preparation  ]. In 1981, one-third of the expense on other workers’ wages shared by school, 22% in 1991, 15% in 2001[ grammatical error/unclear ]. In contrast, expenditure on insurance increased from 2% to 8%[specify a timeframe  ].

    Comparatively, other expenses had a noncontinuous change in total[unclear  ]. Teachers’ salaries covered 40% in 1981[unclear  ], increased to a half in 1991[ punctuation error ] but in 2001 the percentage decrease[ grammatical error ] to 45%. There was a significant decrease in furniture and equipment from 15% to 5%[unclear  ], but it[  unclear pronoun] ascended by 18% in 2001. In the period of the three decades, the resource in school grew 5% from 1981 to 1991, and then slid to 9%.

    Overall, teachers’ salaries took up the largest proportion[  punctuation error] meanwhile the insurance covered the smallest percentage no matter how it[ unclear pronoun ] changed during [  article error]three decades.