Any piece of information referred to as a fact should be mistrusted, since it may well be proven false in the future. Reason: Much of the information that people assume is factual actually turns out to be inaccurate.

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  • Jostar
    University: Minzu University of China
    Nationality: China
    February 27, 2021 at 10:22 am

    Any piece of information referred to as a fact should be mistrusted, since it may well be proven false in the future. Reason: Much of the information that people assume is factual actually turns out to be inaccurate.

    Nowadays, we live in a society with ubiquitous media coverage; thus we are intentionally or unintentionally receive numerous information day in and day out. While a large portion of the information which people believe as truth turns out to be inaccurate, it will be exaggerating to accordingly assume that any piece of information should be suspicious. In my view, the claim should be determined on a case-by-case basis.

    Admittedly, the information in some domains is always changeable, say, science and technology. Since the essence of science is to break new ground, it would be little wonder that scientific theories are updated all the time. In the Middle Age, it was widely believed that the earth is the center of the universe, and the theory was endorsed by the Catholic Church. The mainstream model had considered an undeniable truth in medieval Europe until Nicolaus Copernicus questioned and proposed a new theory which the sun is the center of the universe. Even though Copernicus’ view was supported by later scientists and became the mainstream, it was also challenged when it comes to the 20th century as the result of a breakthrough in astronomy. From the aspect of science, the claim is relatively true because the essence of science is innovation.

    However, if we consider other domains, the claim does not hold. In the field of humanities studies, such as history, the fact seldom changed; what is changed is that people’s view toward certain historical events. For instance, Napolean was deemed as a ruthless tyrant in the early 19th century for his conquests of other European countries and northern Africa. In comparison with the image of Napoleon in the 19th century, modern historians admire his talented military skill and achievement in the promotion of the idea of democracy. Nowadays, people seldom view him as a warmonger but a tragic hero; what has changed is not Napoleon or the deems he did but the view of people. From this point of view, the statement can hardly be considered as justifiable.

    Moreover, though we are now living in an ever-changing world, something is always universal and able to transcend time. It is the nature of human beings, no matter how advanced science has been developed or how many years have passed, human nature is always the same. If we consider the fact about humanity is a sort of information, the reference is most likely trustable and unchangeable, since that information derives from certain aspects of human nature—such as aggression and greed, kindness, and hospitality. Therefore, from this aspect, the claim can be questionable.

    In conclusion, I approve that much of information in some fields like science is more likely to prove to be inaccurate over time; some information is certain but the views towards it vary as society develops, and some information is universal regardless of time, such as the information about human nature.

    February 28, 2021 at 7:55 pm

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. About 50% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them. (TOEFL/IELTS: 15%- qualifies for non-software revision; 30% applies to GRE writing)
    2. About 40% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. (10%- qualifies for non-software TOEFL/IELTS/GRE writing revision );

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    Jostar
    University: Minzu University of China
    Nationality: China
    March 1, 2021 at 8:52 am

    Revised

    Nowadays, media covers every aspect of society; we are inevitably receiving numerous information day in and day out. While people always find some information turns out to be false or inaccurate over time, the assertion is still an unfair generalization to disbelieve every piece of information in life. In my view, we should examine the claim on a case-by-case basis.

    Admittedly, the information in some domains is always changeable, say, science and technology. The phenomenon involves the very nature of science: it requires researchers to challenge the current theories and break new ground, resulting in that scientific theories are updating all the time. For instance, during the Middle Age, the geocentric model, proclaiming that the earth is the center of the universe, had been so popular that even endorsed by the Catholic Church, at least not until Nicolaus Copernicus questioned it. He challenged the previous theory and proposed a new one in which the sun is the center of the universe. Ever since his speculation had been agreed with by later scientists and became the mainstream belief until the development of astronomy and the measurement equipment in the 20th century proved there is no center in the universe because the universe expands from the Big Bang.

    However, when it comes to other domains, the claim is questionable because those facts seldom change. In history, for instance, the events which have happened are impossible to be altered, but what always changes is views toward certain occasions and the figures related to the events. In the past, European Media and historians viewed Napoleon, a French military leader in the early 19th century, as a ruthless tyrant for his conquests of other European countries and northern Africa. There was a twist of his image in the 20th century, starting from the historians who turned to admire his talented military skill and achievement in promoting democracy to the world. Consequently, films and novels have been depicted him as a tragic hero who lost the war instead of an ambitious warmonger who intended to rule the entire Europe, which leads to a shift of view in ordinary people. From this point of view, the statement is hardly justifiable.

    While the world is ever-changing in terms of technology improvements, political systems, and business models, human beings’ nature has been unalterable, transcending the time, no matter how advanced science has been or how democratic the society has become. Therefore, the information which taught us that human nature would never change is always a solid fact. For example, Crime and violence, which stem from certain aspects of human nature-such as aggression and greed, have troubled almost every society at any age. Therefore, what we have learned from the past about human nature can help us study criminal psychology, resulting in successfully preventing future crimes.

    In conclusion, while I agree that information in certain areas like science and technology is frequently updating over time, some information and knowledge are always unchangeable and worth believing.

    March 1, 2021 at 5:32 pm

    Score: 46.4

    Issues:

    1. About 60% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them. (TOEFL/IELTS: 15%- qualifies for non-software revision; 30% applies to GRE writing)
    2. About 35% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. (10%- qualifies for non-software TOEFL/IELTS/GRE writing revision );
    3. Lengthy paragraphs; restrict each paragraph to 110 words. (GRE essay 110-word qualifies for non-software revision; 90- word applies to TOEFL/IELTS essay )

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

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