As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
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January 23, 2020 at 1:03 pm
As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
In the course of the history, human beings have developed a lot of technologies to overcome the challenge of the nature in order to make living. Even though we have some well-developed tools, still there are some challenges originating from the environment. That is the reason we still need to think for ourselves. Thus, I disagree with the statement.
In the past, our ancient ancestors made good use of the animals’ feather to cover their body so that they could get through the cold winter, but they did not stop for looking warmer lives. They found out how to set fire up and used the fire to make the place brighter and warmer. Besides, they used the fire to make the food more delicious and nutritional. However, they still looked for a better place to live. That was why they learned how to change a cave into a simple house and used the logs to build a shelter. That means our ancestors still consider to live in a better place.
Nowadays, although we have better houses to live in and cut-edged technologies to make our lives easier, there still be some problems which we need to confront with. Those cars bring our convenience, but also bring the carbon emission and pollution at the same time. It is a big problem that we are facing today. Our researchers and scientist are now working all the time to deal with it. They have come up a lot of solutions and technologies to reduce the air pollution and carbon emission. That is the reason today our air quality become fresher and environment become better. If they stop considering to deal with the pollution, our world undoubtedly would become worse and more polluted. That is the consequence of their consideration.
However, today we still have some incurable diseases and epidemics. But our medical researchers are trying their best to find the cures and medicines to those diseases. Perhaps in the near future there will be medication for all the diseases which we cannot cope with now. In the end, we are no longer live in the fear of these horrible diseases. It might be the consequence of what they contemplate and come up with.
In short, as I mentioned above, human beings have developed a bunch of solutions for the challenges come from the nature. However, we still try our best to deal with some lasting problems to make the world a better place. Therefore, the ability of human beings to think for ourselves are improving at a constant pace, which is opposed to the claims stated above.
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April 21, 2020 at 2:20 amIn the course of the history, human beings have developed a lot of technologies to overcome the challenge of the nature in order to make a living. Even though we have some well-developed tools, still there are some challenges originating from the environment. That is the reason we still need to think for ourselves. Thus, I disagree with the statement.
In the past, our ancient ancestors made good use of the animals’ feather to cover their body so that they could get through the cold winter, but they did not stop for looking warmer lives. They found out how to set fire up and used the fire to make the place brighter and warmer. Besides, they used the fire to make the food more delicious and nutritional. However, they still looked for a better place to live. That was why they learned how to change a cave into a simple house and used the logs to build a shelter. That means our ancestors still consider to live in a better place.
Nowadays, although we have better houses to live in and cutting-edge technologies to make our lives easier, we still need to confront with problems. Those cars bring our convenience, but also bring the carbon emission and pollution at the same time. It is a big problem that we are facing today. Our researchers and scientists are now working all the time to deal with it. They have come up a lot of solutions and technologies to reduce the air pollution and carbon emission. That is the reason today our air quality become fresher and environment become better. If they stop considering to deal with the pollution, our world undoubtedly would become worse and more polluted. That is the consequence of their consideration.
However, today we still have some incurable diseases and epidemics. But our medical researchers are trying their best to find the cures and medicines to those diseases. Perhaps in the near future there will be medication for all the diseases which we cannot cope with now. In the end, we are no longer live in the fear of these horrible diseases. It might be the consequence of what they contemplate and come up with.
In short, as I mentioned above, human beings have developed a bunch of solutions for the challenges come from the nature. However, we still try our best to deal with some lasting problems to make the world a better place. Therefore, the ability of human beings to think for ourselves are improving at a constant pace, which is opposed to the claim stated above.
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Issues:
- Extensive ARTICLE errors. Please do some independent study to learn how to use articles;
- Very wordy writing. Simplify the sentences if you can. (i.e. the challenge of the nature – natural challenges; make use of- use);
- More than 10% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts;
- Make sure the Subject of a sentence echos the Subject, or the Object, of the prior sentence. Both THERE BE and PASSIVE sentences weaken sentence coherence;
April 27, 2020 at 2:29 amIn the course of history, human beings have developed a lot of technologies to overcome natural challenges to make a living. Even though we have some well-developed tools, there are still new challenges originating from the environment. That is the reason we still need to think for ourselves. Thus, I disagree with the statement.
In the past, our ancient ancestors used animals’ feathers to cover their bodies so that they could get through the cold winter, but they did not stop looking warmer lives. They found out how to set the fire up and used it to make habitats brighter and warmer. Besides, they sanitized the food and made it more delicious with the fire. Our ancestors were not content with what they possessed and still look forward to a better life. That was why they learned how to change a cave into a simple house and used logs to build a shelter. That means our ancestors still consider to find a better habitat.
Nowadays, there are better houses and technologies for us to make our lives warmer and easier, we still need to deal with new problems. These cars bring our conveniences, but also bring carbon emission and air pollution at the same time. It is a big problem that we are facing today. Our researchers and scientists are now working all the time to deal with it. They have come up with a lot of solutions and technologies to reduce air pollution and carbon emission. That is the reason today our air quality becomes fresher, and environment becomes cleaner. If they stop finding solutions to deal with these contamination problems, our world undoubtedly would become more terrible and worse. That is the consequence of their consideration.
However, today we still have some incurable diseases and epidemics. Our medical researchers are trying their best to find cures and medicines to those diseases. Perhaps, in the near future, there will be medication for all the diseases which we cannot cope with now. In the end, we are no longer live in the fear of these horrible diseases. It might be the consequence of what they contemplate and come up with.
In short, as I mentioned above, human beings have developed a bunch of solutions for natural challenges. However, we still try our best to deal with some lasting problems to make the world a better place. Therefore, the ability of human beings to think for ourselves is improving at a constant pace, which is opposed to the claim stated above.
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Final Revision
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