At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

As the resource of education increase [  grammatical error ] year after year,( basic things)[ unclear  ] like[ such as  ] libraries and classes are good[ vague word  ] enough for today’s students. However, those are not the only requirement[ word form error  ] of[ for  ] modern students, especially for college students. Since social skills and great[ vague word  ] health are equally important to GPA, a[ article error  ] wonderful[ vague word  ] after-class activities are essential in college education. Consequently, sports and social activities should definitely receive equal financial support as the[ article error  ] classes and libraries do.

Initially, an overall development has been raised as standard of college education for a long time which is essential to success. Learning academic knowledge is vital for college students, but it is not enough to obtain a bright future after graduation. This is why almost every school has a large number of associations. The world-renowned Chinese pianist Langlang who had college education in USA is a vivid example. When he studied piano in America, his teacher did not tell him to spend all his time practicing but asked him to make more friends and have a fantastic social life. Langlang had a better comprehension in classic music after the study experience in America and became a famous pianist soon.

Moreover, sports and social activities can enhance the efficiency of study. Imagine that you just study day after day, morning till the night, it is impossible to have an efficient study in such situation. There is a old saying goes, “effort should combine with relaxation”, which means the best way to accomplish is having relaxation after a period of struggling. Tiredness will come up with study and being exhausted can really make us feel boring and dislike what we are learning. So, it is the job of sports and social activities to make us relax and regain the passion for study.

Above all, we have a glimpse at advantages sports and social activities have. Since these after-class activities are great for overall development, study efficiency and mental health of colleges students, it is no doubt that they should receive equal financial support compare to classes and libraries.

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Should sports and social activities receive the equal financial support?

As the [ educational  ]resource[s   ] of education increases year after year, basic things[vague – facilities   ] like[ such as  ] libraries and classes[ classrooms  ] are[dull BE verb – become   ] adequate for students. However, since social skills and a healthy body are (equally important to)[grammatical error   ] one’s GPA, qualified after-class activities which[that…if you use Which, you need to use comma   ] do not[avoid using NOT  ] get the [ lack necessary  ]support they deserve are essential in[ for  ] college education. Consequently, sports and social activities ought to receive equal financial support as the classes and libraries.

Initially, an overall development which is critical for students to succeed has been raised as a standard of college education for a long time. Learning academic knowledge is vital for college students, but it is not enough to obtain a bright future after graduation. Therefore almost every school has a large number of associations, which is some kind of support for activities that have nothing to do with grades but is related to other practical skills. The world-renowned Chinese pianist Lang Lang who had college education in the United States is a vivid example. When he studied piano in America, his teacher did not tell him to spend all his time practicing but asked him to make more friends and have a fantastic social life. After the study experience in the America, Lang Lang had a better comprehension in the classic music and became a famous pianist soon.

Moreover, sports and social activities can enhance the efficiency of study. Imagining that you just study day after day, morning till night, it is impossible to have an efficient study in such situations. As an old saying goes, “effort should combine with relaxation”, which means the best way to accomplish is having relaxation after a period of struggling. Tiredness will come up with study and being exhausted can really make us feel bored and hate what we are learning. So, it is the job of sports and social activities to make us relax and regain the passion for study. As long as we feel upset during studying, My friends in university and I will participate in activities of our association or play sports such as basketball, then we will recover from the tiredness and study harder and more efficiently.

Excepting what has been mentioned, sports and social activities still have another crucial function. As is known to us, mental health is extremely important for all college students. Participating in sports and social activities can give students a better mental condition and mentality, which will ensure safe and healthy growth.

Above all, we have a glimpse at advantages sports and social activities have. Since these after-class activities are beneficial for overall development, study efficiency and mental health of colleges students, it is no doubt that they should receive equal financial support compare to classes and libraries.