Attend college or university for many reasons

  • April 23, 2019 at 9:08 pm


    University: XD University

    Nationality: China

    April 23, 2019 at 10:57 am

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    TOEFL TOPIC: People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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    Nowadays, it is a trend that most graduating high school students have already begun to consider attending college. As a general social phenomenon, it must have some virtues behind it.

    First of all, we are living in a time of knowledge exploration, which means we should have mental preparation for learning throughout our whole life. Under the pressure of society and career in the future, we need to keep on learning the latest technology skills and professional knowledge especially for some professions such as architects and engineers. In this situation, we need an environment to prepare for the competition in the future, and college or university is an ideal place because in the college, there are outstanding professors and advanced laboratories available which give us access to promote our abilities most effectively. In addition, though the academic diploma cannot fully represent the ability of a person, it plays a crucial role in his/her career life. An excellent diploma is one of the preconditions to a good job in most situations.

    Besides, during college life, we can obtain many friends having the same goal or hobby as us. They would become valuable in our future growth. We can not only share our experience and feelings, but also communicate professional thoughts with them. Admittedly, studying in college or university is a precious experience. As we are getting older, we usually have a great many other things which would divert our attention, thus we have less chance to enjoy the pure happiness of learning. In my opinion, as an integrated man, this experience is essential. For instance, it is common that many successful athletes and business people go back to school after they have obtained great achievement.

    For these reasons above, it is worthwhile for people to attend college or university. And it is no wonder that many people value their college experiences. .

    Comments: Very good work. Please keep in mind that TOEFL is essentially a checklist of grammar and usage errors. That means it is better to avoid complex sentence structure since that increases the chances of mistakes. I hope that helps!