Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.

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We all know that the [ The  ]world is making such a rapid change[s every day] today. However, when it comes to the discussions about the attitude towards life, people’s opinions vary. [ Use your own words to write  ]As far as I am concerned, [ use your own words to write  ]people now are (more happy)[ grammatical error  ] and satisfied with their lives, for[unclear coordination conjunction   ] we have better living conditions and more entertainment [ resources  ].

Firstly, due to the development of modern society [ has improved  ], people’s living conditions[.   ] have been greatly improved[  unnecessary passive ]. The world is totally different[use concrete verb   ] [ differs enormously  ]from what it was in the past, and revolutionary [ /disruptive technological  ]innovations in technology have made our lives more convenient. From the [ article error  ]sophisticated public transportation system[ s  ], to the most advanced smart phone[ smartphones  ], we can enjoy[ confusion  ] the benefits of technology. By just purchasing a flight ticket, you[ shift of person  ] can go nearly anywhere you want within hours, and it[ unclear pronoun  ] is also feasible for you[shift of person   ] to see someone through video chatting. These things[ vague word/benefits  ] were not[avoid using NOT   ] even imagined[unnecessary passive   ][ unimaginable  ] in the past. Had it not been [  for ]the change of the world, our lives could[grammatical error in subjunctive voice   ] not be so pleasant as today.

In addition, the change of the world also provides us with more diversified [ entertainment  ] methods of entertainment. The prosperous booming in [ the fields of  ]literature, music, and movies are among the most significant examples. We have much more choices for fun than it was several decades ago. It[unclear pronoun   ] is quite common for people to [ We can readily  ]go to a cinema for a sci-fi movie, [ but such an opportunity remained scarce  ]while it was quite rare to have the opportunity to watch a film when our parents were [ young  ]kids. One can also enjoy the live show of a basketball game or a concert by just turning on the television. With so many different [ expanded channels of  ]entertainments [ entertainment  ], there are [ avoid using There Be  ]more and more people being[become/are   ] satisfied with [ their lives  ] the life we have today.

In conclusion, taking [In light of improved   ]living conditions, [ enriched  ]entertainment[ s  ] [, as well as less   ]and life stress into consideration, I firmly deem [ am of the opinion  ]that [ we enjoy a  ]our life today is more satisfactory and pleasant [ life  ]. With the change of the world, we have had a life more convenient and more colorful.