Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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  • shinxg
    University: University of Chinese Academic and Science(Master) Huazhong University of Science and Technology(Bachelor)
    Nationality: China
    February 15, 2020 at 9:50 am

    Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

    Computers now play a vital role in our society. Some people think that the computer is the most important invention of the last century. While others have different opinions. The essay supports the former idea that there are not other inventions more important than the computer. Firstly, the essay will discuss the convenience that the computer provides us with and secondly, discuss how the computer eliminates manual work.

    Computers are used everywhere we can imagine since they bring us lots of conveniences. Customers use shopping websites or smartphone applications to buy whatever they want online. Browsing goods on the computer is much easier than driving to the shopping mall. Many young people do not know how to cook a meal. And ordering meals on the computer is an alternative. Years ago, we communicated with each other through letters. Now we use instant messager like Facebook, Wechat. No waiting is needed anymore. It can be drawn that computers have made our life more convenient than years ago in many aspects.

    The computer is originally designed to deal with complex calculations that are used to be done by people. Calculating is a tiring and complex job. People often make mistakes doing such a job all day. Computers surely free us from tough calculation problems. After years of development, computers are able to do more difficult things now. Computers can control machines to produce goods without human guidance. In addition, advanced techniques like image recognition and automatic driving are also running on computers. Lots of tasks used to be done by the human now can be completed by computers.

    In conclusion, there is no doubt that the computer is the most essential invention in the last 100 years since it not only makes our life convenient but also reduces lots of manual and complex tasks.

    February 20, 2020 at 8:23 pm

    Score: 65

    Issues:

    1. More than 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    shinxg
    University: University of Chinese Academic and Science(Master) Huazhong University of Science and Technology(Bachelor)
    Nationality: China
    February 21, 2020 at 10:11 am

    I have revised my essay, please take a look. Thanks.

     

    Computers now play an essential role in our society. Some people think that the computer is the most important invention of the last century. While others think other inventions are of more importance. The essay supports the former argument. Firstly, the essay will show how the computer simplifies our life and secondly, discuss how it eliminates manual work.

    Computers have made our life more convenient than years ago in many aspects. Customers use shopping websites or smartphone applications to buy whatever they want online. Browsing goods on the computer is much easier than driving to the shopping mall. Many young people do not know how to cook a meal. Ordering meals on the computer is an alternative. Years ago, we communicated with each other through letters. We had to wait for several days or even months before our friends received our letters. Now we use instant messager like Facebook, Wechat.

    People created the computer in the purpose of dealing with complex calculations. Calculating is a tiring and complicated job. People often make mistakes doing such a job all day. Computers free us from annoying calculation problems. After years of development, computers can do more complex things now. Computers can control machines to produce goods without human guidance. Besides, advanced techniques like image recognition and automatic driving are running on computers. Computers can complete lost of tasks used to be done by the human.

    In conclusion, the computer has made our life convenient and reduced lots of manual tasks. There is no doubt that the computer is the most important invention in the last 100 years.

    March 4, 2020 at 9:15 pm

    Score: 65.8

    Final Revision

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    People created the [article error  ] computer in [wrong preposition  ] the purpose of dealing with complex calculations. Calculating is a tiring and complicated job.[ choppy sentences ] People often make mistakes doing such a job all day. Computers free us from annoying calculations problems. After years of development, computers can do more complex things now. Computers[ too many repetitions ] can control machines to produce goods without human guidance. Besides, advanced techniques like image recognition and automatic driving are running on computers. Computers can complete lost of tasks used to be done by the human.

    In conclusion, the [article error  ] computer has made our life convenient and reduced lots of manual tasks. [ Lack of connection ] There is no doubt that the As such, I agree that computer is the most important invention in the last 100 years.