Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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    University: 中国地质大学(武汉)
    Nationality: China
    November 12, 2020 at 1:28 pm

    Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

    Convenience foods are expected to gain more popularity and eventually overtake traditional foods and food-preparing methods. However, I tend to disagree with the idea.

    Traditional dishes and approaches of food preparation cannot be taken place by convenience foods. First and foremost, foods and methods invented by ancient people tend to be healthier for human body, while fast foods, most of which are junk foods, contain preservatives and artificial flavorings. In this sense, commuters may stick to eating and preparing for food in a traditional way, instead of eating convenience foods frequently.

    It could also be argued that convenience foods and traditional foods and approaches are generally distributed in different societies. Convenience foods often serve those commuters who live a fast-paced life in big cities. Urban dwellers have no time to eat and cook, and convenience foods are more suitable to them. By contrast, traditional foods and secrets for preparing food are generally preserved by rural residents living in a relatively traditional society. They value traditional culture, which can be reflected in traditional foods and methods. As such, two kinds of products and methods may co-exist in today’s world.

    In spite of those, it should be admitted that convenience foods will be more pervasive in modern society. People have been struggling with a stressful commute, a short break during work and undue workload. To save time, a growing number of people are estimated to choose convenience foods to recharge their batteries.

    In conclusion, I disagree with the idea that fast foods can be an alternative to traditional foods, but more people will choose them in the future.

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    University: University of Wisconsin
    November 20, 2020 at 10:10 pm

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