Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

There are all kinds of art forms (in modern society)[ misplaced  ], such as pictures, music, and film. Some people think that creative artists should express ideas without government restrictions. As far as I am concerned, giving creative artists freedom is appropriate.

[  To begin with, freedom ]Freedom inspires the creativity of creative artists. [ improve coherence with the last sentence  ]The artists can concentrate on creating the work[ spelling error  ] of art whenever they gain inspiration. As a result, it[unclear pronoun   ] is more likely that more and more creative art will [likely   ]appear. On the contrary, creative artists spare time on government restrictions[unclear sentence   ]. [ Choppy sentence  ]They have to be careful enough to avoid[lack a verb here   ] their ideas against government restrictions.

[ lack coherence with the last paragraph  ]It[ unclear pronoun  ] is obvious that freedom makes creative artists more productive. The[article error   ] artists can express their ideas and make them[ unclear pronoun  ] come true. In contrast, government restrictions may make it difficult for creative artists to achieve[ conceive  ] some ideas. As a result, creative artists maybe[ may  ] give up these ideas and spend lots of time figuring out a new idea that is not beyond [ without violating/offending/challenging  ]government restrictions.

Admittedly, some art forms such as the porn may have a negative [ societal  ]influence on the society because they can spread widely[ weak evidence to support your argument; make it strong  ]. If children watch[grammatical error – subjunctive    ] porn at an early age, they will[grammatical error   ] be[replace dull BE verb with stronger verb   ] easily addicted to it[ unclear pronoun  ], which affects their (growth and development)[ redundant  ]. However, the government can take measures to (restrict watching people)[logical confusion   ] rather than creative artists. For instance, children are not allowed to watch porn until they are 18 years old.

To sum up, giving creative artists freedom is appropriate, especially when the[ article error  ] creativity and output of the artists are taken into consideration.