TPO 74 – Agree or disagree: Teaching is harder than it was in the past

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  • Soin_xu
    University: Wuhan University
    Nationality: China
    May 5, 2019 at 2:33 pm

    The teacher is explaining complicated physics theories to students on a blackboard.

    TOPIC: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

    Education, the foundation of a quality life, has been valued and even triggers a heated discussion over whether teaching is more difficult now than past. Contrary to these people’s opinions is my perspective that teaching now is superior, due to contribution of distance learning and better education facilities.

    What must be prioritized is that taking distance-learning courses, instead of taking classes in traditional classrooms, is beneficial to students’ academic learning, by offering them more knowledge and triggering their enthusiasm in learning. To begin with, online-courses can provide students with the access to a plenty of knowledge. To be more specific, students can acquire a wide range of knowledge in art, history and math, enabling them to strengthen their base; in contrast, students, in the past, can obtain limited knowledge from their own teachers when they stayed at concrete class. Moreover, never we can ignore the significance of distance education to students’ interest in learning. To explain it further, with kinds of teaching methods online, students are likely to consider it interesting to deal with math problems, write papers and search information online; on the other hand, in the past, you can image that simply pouring plenty of knowledge into students’ brain would only make them fall asleep.

    What should be equally worth discussing is that better teaching facilities enable students, enjoying the development of technology, to have excellent environment to enhance their performance in study by possessing enough projectors and laboratories. Initially, it is well-acknowledged that projector can display more direct image to students, which enables them to have better understanding of knowledge in a short time. By mastering teaching points quickly, students can have more time to hone their skills and teachers can make excellent teaching easily; on the contrary, previously, under no circumstance, could students master key points in a while by just seeing simple signals on blackboard. Additionally, enough laboratory make students have better chance to check the points which they learn in books. In detail, by doing trials, students can be inspired by the process of a trial and motivate them to seek for the nature of a phenomenon or a formula, thus students can get enormous harvest in their study; however, it is impossible for students in the past to possess the advantage of doing trial to push their advancement in study for lack of enough money devoted to construct laboratories.

    Distance-learning, a way for students to study online, make students have access to acquire more knowledge and boost their enthusiasm for study. What’s more, great teaching facilities, which cannot be obtained in the past, can inspire students chasing study themselves. In conclusion, never can we ignore the validity that teaching is easier today than past.

     

    May 6, 2019 at 9:26 pm

    Score: 47.4

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    • Shorten/split sentences exceeding 20 words;
    • Restrict each paragraph to 85 words;
    • Convert passive-voice sentences into their active counterparts.

    Your essay contains many more issues, but fix the issues noted above and then I will point out additional problems. Rewrite and resubmit your essay.

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    Lin Qiu

    Soin_xu
    University: Wuhan University
    Nationality: China
    May 8, 2019 at 5:17 am

    Education, the foundation of a superior life, has been valued and even triggers a heated discussion over whether teaching is more difficult now than past. Contrary to these people’s opinions is my perspective that teaching now is superior, due to contributions of distance learning and better education facilities.

    To begin with, online- courses today make teaching easier than past. In detail, online-courses can provide students with access to plenty of knowledge. Students can acquire a wide range of knowledge in art, history and math, enabling them to strengthen their base. With this help, students, lack of enough ability to absorb knowledge, can continue studying at home to comprehend key points. To be more specific, not only can excellent students can acquire great performance in study, but also inferior kids can obtain their satisfactory grades.

    Moreover, excellent facilities nowadays can help student master key points quickly. Initially, it is well-acknowledged that projector can display direct image to students, which enables them to have better understanding of knowledge in a short time. By mastering teaching points quickly, students can have more time to hone their skills and teachers can save time to prepare class well. What’s more, laboratory, not obtained in past, can give a chance to students, by which students can do some trial to check theories learned in class.

    Admittedly, kids in the past cannot be distracted by electronic devices from studying which is a great advantage that students lack today, thus enabling them to focus on their study. However, this problem can be easily solved by banning using mobiles in school. In conclusion, students today have more excellent environment to study.

    Distance-learning, a way for students to study online, make students have access to acquire more knowledge. Better facilities can help students check the theory learned. In conclusion, never can we ignore the validity that teaching is easier today than in the past.

    May 8, 2019 at 9:58 pm

    Score: 55.6 / Rewrite and re-upload your essay.

    Suggestions for Improvement

    1. Convert passive-voice sentences into active ones;
    2. Shorten/split sentences exceeding 20 words.

    Problems Highlight

    Education, the foundation of a superior life, has been valued [Passive Voice] and even triggers a heated discussion over whether teaching is more difficult now than past.[Verbose, hard-to-read sentence] Contrary to these people’s opinions is my perspective that teaching now is superior, due to contributions of distance learning and better education facilities.[Verbose, hard-to-read sentence]

    To begin with, online- courses today make teaching easier than past. In detail, online-[Conventions Error]courses can provide students with access to plenty of knowledge. Students can acquire a wide range of knowledge[Repetition]in art, history and math, enabling them to strengthen their base. With this help, students, lack [Gramatical Error]of enough ability to absorb knowledge, can continue studying at home to comprehend key points. To be more specific, not only can excellent students can [Gramatical Error] acquire great performance in study, but also inferior kids can obtain their satisfactory grades.[Verbose, hard-to-read sentence]

    Moreover, excellent [Repetition] facilities nowadays can help student master key points quickly. Initially, it is well-acknowledged [Passive Voice] that projector can display direct [Article Error] image to students, which enables them to have [Article Error]better understanding of knowledge in a short time.[Verbose, hard-to-read sentence] By mastering teaching points quickly[Repetition], students can have more time to hone their skills and teachers can save time to prepare class well. What’s more, laboratory, not obtained in [Article Error]past [Gramatical Error], can give a chance to students, by which students can do some trial to check theories learned in class.

    Admittedly, kids in the past cannot [Gramatical Error]be distracted by electronic devices from studying which is a great advantage that students lack today, thus enabling them to focus on their study.[Verbose, hard-to-read sentence] However, this problem can be easily[Unnecessary adverb] solved by banning using mobiles in school. In conclusion, students today have [Article Error]more excellent environment to study.[More…Than]

    Distance-learning, a way for students to study online, make [Gramatical Error]students have access [Repetition]to acquire more knowledge. Better facilities can help students check the theory learned. In conclusion, never can we ignore the validity that teaching is easier today than in the past.