Some people believe that governments should pay for healthcare, while others say that it is not the government’s responsibility. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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  • Darren212
    University: PLKCHC (a secondary school)
    Nationality: China
    July 16, 2020 at 11:39 am

    Some people believe that governments should pay for healthcare, while others say that it is not the government’s responsibility. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

    In many countries, there has been extensive debate over who should pay for public healthcare.

    Pensioners and the working class expect the government to pay the full costs of their healthcare in return for the taxes they paid. It is also expected that children, students, people with disabilities and the unemployed will have their medical bills covered by the state because they reckon that they are among those groups most deserving of help. Medical care is fundamental to the well-being of a nation, s it fulfils the basic need of citizens. Therefore, a government, rich or poor, has the responsibility to provide the best possible welfare to its citizens, especially the sick and the underprivileged.

    However, a government sometimes does not have enough resources to provide free medical care for everyone. For most countries in the world, free education, national defence and technology development are the number-one concerns. They believe that these matters are the roots of the state, which make the nation more sustainable. As a result, countries at the large lay emphasis on these three matters, causing a heavy burden on governments’ treasury. Thus, it is not workable to ask governments to pay all bills for public healthcare. Otherwise, those states will fall into expense overload. At that time, not only does free healthcare fail, but also other policies such as free education and new technology development.

    In conclusion, a government should strive to make its medical system as efficient as possible. This ensures medical fees and hospital costs are affordable for the general public. Despite its difficulties, the full costs of medical treatment for people in need like the disabled, pregnant women and older people should be borne by a government. This is because they are the most vulnerable groups in society. As for other people, they should still pay part of their medical bills to achieve the state’s sustainability.

    July 18, 2020 at 11:47 am

    Score: 59.8

    Issues:

    1. Many pronouns (it, they)are unclear. Examine them and replace unclear pronouns with nouns.
    2. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.

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    Darren212
    University: PLKCHC (a secondary school)
    Nationality: China
    July 20, 2020 at 2:34 pm

    In many countries, there has been extensive debate over who should pay for public healthcare.

    Pensioners and the working class expect the government to pay the full costs of their healthcare in return for their taxes. Also, the needy like the unemployed are looking forward to free medical bills. They believed that they are among those groups most deserving of help. Since medical care is fundamental to the well-being of a nation, as it fulfils the basic need of citizens. Therefore, a government, rich or poor, has the responsibility to provide the best possible welfare to its citizens, not to mention the sick and the underprivileged.

    However, a government sometimes does not have enough resources to provide free medical care for everyone. For instance, a government sometimes spends its expenses in other fields. Take technology development as an example, a country may think it is a root of the state. As a result, the country invests more on it. Yet, this then results in a heavy burden on governments’ treasury. Thus, it is not workable to ask governments to pay all bills for public healthcare. Otherwise, those states will fall into expense overload. At that time, not only will free healthcare fail, but also other policies such as free education and technology development.

    In conclusion, a government should strive to make its medical system as efficient as possible. As the efficient medical system ensures medical fees and hospital costs are affordable for the general public. Despite governments’ challenges, they should shoulder the full costs of medical treatment for needy people like the disabled. Because these needy people are the most vulnerable groups in society. As for other people, they should still pay part of their medical bills to achieve the state’s sustainability.

    July 21, 2020 at 3:13 pm

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. There are lots of grammatical/tense/article errors.