Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 

  • Elizabeth
    University: Beijing Jiaotong University
    Nationality: China
    September 10, 2020 at 5:49 am

    Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 

    Public transportation is of great importance to the development of society,including the prosperity of economy as well as the progress of the citizen well-being.As a result,the topic that which is the most proper means of transportation has been under debate for a long time,especially when it comes to the comparison of railways and roads.In my opinion,both of them own unique merit and certainly,drawbacks.

    In the category of infrastructure,roads own a rather significant status,which can be reflected not only in the process of breaking natural barrier in the past but in the revolutionary change it brought to the passenger and cargo transportation.First of all,the long history of the construction of roads,a whole set of technology and solutions applying to different geographical features has been developed and polished.Therefore roads almost own the best accessibility in all regions.Even the faraway areas and mountainous villages can be reached.Furthermore,the construction of roads accelerates the speed of inter-city and inter-regional movement of people and goods,at the same time,the flexibility of roads mean that the final destination can be arrived in most cases while plains and railways fail to make it for the lack of station close to the terminal point.

    Although flexibility and accessibility of railways are not so excellent as roads,the speed and volume is the main competitive strength of it,leading to a strong power of prospering economy on a wide area basis.More precisely,the high speed of railways means that more shift will be achieved in a limited time further place will be arrived and more time for travel or delivery will be saved,coupled with the effect of the large volume of each train,daily average transportation volume will reach a considerably high level.

    To sum up,each form of transport infrastructure owns irreplaceable place in the comprehensive traffic system.Only when we realize the reasonable layout of each mode of transportation can we promote the modernization of transportation network.

    September 11, 2020 at 1:02 am

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