Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, art and sport are playing two important roles in our daily life. [punctuation error with coordinating conjunction  ]And their developments have aroused many people’s attention. Some people maintain that the[ article error ] government should (spend more money on funding)[repetitive  ] the arts, while others think athletics should get a larger proportion. In my perspective, I agree with the idea that governments should spend more money in support of the arts.[repetition  ]

Firstly, art can act as an outlet for venting stress. Art builds a dramatic and fancy world, which is different from the real world. By viewing the [ article error ]beautiful paintings or enjoying the[article error  ] mellifluous music, people can get away from the hectic life. The constructed art world provides a path that attaches reality to the [ article error ]imagination. Getting rid of the[article error  ] trouble and difficulties in real life for a breath contributes to moving on with more energy[facilitates personal and professional advancement  ]. I always go to the[article error  ] art museum at my university when I feel stressed[/fraught  ]. The crafted cave paintings and the melodious music [ exhibited in the museum ] make me feel relaxed and energetic[ /refreshed (refreshed – relaxed) ]. Once I step out of the art museum, I can prepare myself to rivet on the busy studying life again[academics  ].

Secondly, art is [replace BE verb with a concrete verb  ]an indispensable part of education. The constantly developing society has solicited[wrong word  ] a higher standard of education. In addition to the[article error  ] conventional subjects such as language, maths, and science, the[ article error ] students need to learn more (different knowledge)[ grammatical error ]. The [ article error ]art can foster students’ creativity and imagination. My nephew likes painting, so his parents hire a famous painter to teach him at the [article error  ]weekends. His parents always take him to varieties of art centers to enjoy painting exhibitions. Before he learned painting, he was[ grammatical error ] a taciturn shy boy in class. But after a series of lessons, he frequently raises[ inconsistency in tense ] creative questions. Since creativity is one of the most demanded abilities in our society, (funding more on art )[  grammatical error]has [vague verb  ]significant long-term benefits.

In a nutshell, artists should get more money than athletes.[focus on art and athletics rather than artists and athelets   ]