Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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  • Sabrina122558
    University: Quanzhou Normal University
    Nationality: China
    March 13, 2020 at 8:27 am

    Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

    Happiness Is What We Seek

    For all living creatures on earth,happiness is at least the one thing we seek and desire.With everyone who is confronted with sadness and disappointment,we told them to be happy,we told them that happiness rules,happiness tops everything.But why is happiness really important to us?

    One thing is for sure,with all the millions of researches we have done throughout history,we finally found the necessary correlation between happiness and health.That’s right.Those who feel happy almost everyday tend to live a much healthier life compared with those who spend most of their day complaining about how unfairly they are treated and being unhappy.Apart from that,according to credible study,the feeling of happiness can stimulate our brain to generate some kind of chemical substance that is said to inspire our creativity and imagination.And that’s how we can see the importance of happiness.

    The problem,however,is the definition of being happy.It’s already a lot of trouble for us to achieve happiness,now we even have difficulty defining it.Nevertheless,the reason is quite simple.We all know how the thought of getting candies thrilled us back in our childhood,but for most people,after they have grown up,the only thing that makes them happy is to get other’s acknowledgement.And we all read the story about how different the view of happiness vary from the rich and the poor.

    So what matters to improve our happiness index?Initially,happiness lies,first,in health.There’s no doubt that people who lead a healthy lifestyle are inclined to be happier than those who live against natural rhythm.Furthermore,experts have suggested that maintaining bonding and close relationships with friends and family is of great help in enhancing happiness level.

    Overall,it’s all up to us in terms of achieving happiness each of us desire.

    March 16, 2020 at 2:28 am

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. About 60% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. About 60% of the sentences are passive. Convert them into their active counterparts.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    March 16, 2020 at 2:30 am

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    Sabrina122558
    University: Quanzhou Normal University
    Nationality: China
    March 17, 2020 at 2:40 am

    For all living creatures on earth, happiness is at least the one thing we seek and desire. When people confront sadness and disappointment, we always encouraged them to be happy. But why is happiness important to us?

    One thing is for sure, through millions of researches we have done, we finally found the necessary correlation between happiness and health. Compared with people who spend most of their time being unhappy and complaining about how unfairly they are treated, those who feel happy on a daily basis tend to live a much healthier life. Apart from that,according to study, the feeling of happiness can stimulate our brain to generate some kind of chemical substance, which is said to inspire our creativity and imagination. That’s how we can see the importance of happiness.

    However happiness is quite difficult to define,because it means so many different things for different people. While some people link happiness to wealth and material success, others think it lies in emotions and loving personal relationships. Yet others think that spiritual paths, rather than either the material world or relationships with people, are the only way to happiness.

    So what matters to improve our happiness index? Initially, happiness lies, first, in health. There’s no doubt that people who lead a healthy lifestyle are inclined to be happier than those who live against natural rhythm. Furthermore, experts have suggested that maintaining bonding and close relationships with friends and family are of great help in enhancing happiness level.

    Overall, it’s all up to us in terms of achieving happiness each of us desire.

    March 17, 2020 at 2:42 am

    Score: 58.6

    Issues:

    1. About 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. About 30% of the sentences are passive. Convert them into their active counterparts.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    Sabrina122558
    University: Quanzhou Normal University
    Nationality: China
    March 18, 2020 at 6:53 am

    For all living creatures on earth, happiness is at least the one thing we seek and desire. When people confront sadness and disappointment, we always encouraged them to be happy. But why is happiness important to us?

    One thing is for sure, through millions of researches we have done, we finally found the necessary correlation between happiness and health. Compared with people who spend most of their time being unhappy and complaining about how unfairly others treat them, those who always feel happy tend to live a much healthier life. Furthermore, a science report suggests that the feeling of happiness can stimulate our brain to generate a chemical substance, which is conducive to inspire our creativity and imagination. That’s how we can see the importance of happiness.

    However, happiness is quite hard to define because it means so many different things for different people. While some people link happiness to wealth and material success, others reckon it lies in emotions and loving personal relationships. Yet others think that spiritual paths,rather than either the material world or relationships with people, are the only way to happiness.

    So what matters to improve our happiness index? Happiness lies, first, in health. There’s no doubt that people who lead a healthy lifestyle are inclined to be happier than those who live against natural rhythm. Furthermore, experts have suggested that maintaining bonding and close relationships with friends and family are of great help in enhancing happiness level.

    Overall, it’s all up to us in terms of achieving happiness each of us desires.

    March 21, 2020 at 2:00 am

    Score: 59.5

    Issues:

    1. About 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. About 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert them into their active counterparts.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.