Human activities have negative effects on plant and animal species. Some people think it is too late to do anything about this problem. Others believe effective measures can be taken to improve this situation. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing Human activities have negative effects on plant and animal species. Some people think it is too late to do anything about this problem. Others believe effective measures can be taken to improve this situation. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

  • Thomas
    University: Tianjin University of
    Nationality: China
    July 3, 2019 at 1:51 pm

    Environmental pollution severely affect an ecosystem, which poses the treat of distinction for both plants and animals.

    IELTS Writing Topic: Human activities have negative effects on plant and animal species. Some people think it is too late to do anything about this problem. Others believe effective measures can be taken to improve this situation. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

    There’s much talk about the detrimental impacts human brought to the ecological system, though few effective measures were devised. In fact, irreversible damage may have been made, but solutions to change the status quo remain possible.

    Indeed, the claim that time has already run out for remedies is not entirely unfounded, because irrevocable damage brought by human activities invalidates any countermeasures. In specific, species cruelly murdered by poachers cannot be resurrected by any human endeavor. Similarly, discarded plastic waste deprives plants and animals of habitat, because it takes years for these plastics to decay. It is not too much of a stretch to say that, efforts are meaningless at this point because it is simply too far gone.

    Be that as it may, the same cannot be said of protecting endangered species, given the fact that efforts have already been made by many countries if looking in the rearview mirror. Setting up reservations always serves as an effective approach to protecting dying animals and plants from harm. In the last century, the US government established Yosemite and Yellow Stone reservations and successfully preserved dying wildlife.

    After examining both sides, I understand the grief for losses, but this is not an excuse for giving up trying. To improve this situation, stricter animal protection laws and supervision should be in place. Close scrutiny reveals that poaching is one of the fundamental causes of mass extinction. Being faced with more years of imprisonment or a possible life sentence, poachers will think twice before committing any criminal acts. Simultaneously, the police force shall take responsibility to protect existing regulations. This would certainly be a major lift for the current situation.

    Undoubtedly, humans should be held accountable for the species’ ordeals. It would be too short-sighted to deny any efforts made to amend our deeds. In conclusion, effective measures should and could be taken to save what can be saved.

    July 7, 2019 at 4:41 am

    Score: 54.8

    Suggestions for Improvement

    • Convert passive sentences into their active counterparts;
    • Overly use of adverbs including many problematic adverbs.

    Problems Highlight

    There’s much talk about the detrimental impacts [Word form error] human [wrong word] brought to the ecological system, though few effective measures were devised. [passive]In fact, irreversible damage may have been made[passive], but solutions to change the status quo remain possible.
     
    Indeed, the claim that time has already run out for remedies is not entirely unfounded, [punctuation error]because irrevocable damage brought by human activities invalidates any countermeasures. In specific, species cruelly murdered by poachers cannot be resurrected by [passive]any human endeavor. Similarly, discarded plastic waste deprives plants and animals of habitat, [punctuation error]because it takes years for these plastics to decay. It is not too much of a stretch to say that, [punctuation error]efforts are meaningless at this point because it[unclear pronoun] is simply too far gone.
     
    Be that as it may, the same cannot be said[passive] of protecting endangered species, given the fact that efforts have already been made by[passive] many countries if looking in the rearview mirror. [Verbose/confusion]Setting up reservations always serves as an effective approach to protecting dying animals and plants from harm. In the last century, the US government established Yosemite and Yellow Stone reservations and successfully preserved dying wildlife.[Verbose]
     
    After examining both sides, I understand the grief for losses, but this is not an excuse for giving up trying. To improve this situation, stricter animal protection laws and supervision should be in place. Close scrutiny reveals that poaching is one of the fundamental causes of mass extinction. Being faced[passive] with more years of imprisonment or a possible life sentence, poachers will think twice before committing any criminal acts. [Verbose] Simultaneously, the police force shall [wrong word] take responsibility to protect existing regulations. This would certainly be a major lift for the current situation.
     
    Undoubtedly, humans should be held [passive]accountable for the species’ ordeals. It would be too short-sighted to deny any efforts made to amend our deeds. In conclusion, effective measures should and could be taken [passive]to save what can be saved. [passive]

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