Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but other people think that it is not necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen on TV and the Internet.

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  • liangningstella
    University: Southern Medical University
    Nationality: Southern Medical University
    November 19, 2019 at 3:01 am

    IELTS Task 2:  Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but other people think that it is not necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen on TV and the Internet. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

    Traveling all over the world has become a prevailing lifestyle of modern individuals nowadays.Different people hold different views about whether it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries or not.Personally,I think it’s necessary.

    On the one hand,those who consider it unnecessary to go abroad may believe that they are accessible to all the information from the Internet, which they think would be more convenient compared with going abroad as they can know about the foreign culture readily whenever and wherever possible.Moreover,they might think it is a great expenditure on money, time and energy to go to other countries, because they have to reserve airplane tickets and hotels as well as make travel plans and guides.What’s more, we can also make friends with foreigners via the information developed Internet.So,they think there is no need to go abroad.

    On the other hand, the supporters of traveling abroad may argue that learning about other countries only from the TV and Internet is really insufficient and only when we arrive at that country to experience local culture directly can we learn about what actually the real life it is there.For example,we can acquire more details when we go shopping there or taste the local special snacks or communicate and interact with local people, which cannot come true only with the information from Internet.Besides,in our travels,we can take part in the festival activities together with local people,which would be an unique experience of ourselves.

    In conclusion,I think traveling abroad is necessary and well-worthy,and it’s also a great memory and special experience of our life.

    November 20, 2019 at 10:14 pm

    Score: ungraded

    Issues: About 2/3 of the sentences exceed 20 words. You need to shorten/split them.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    liangningstella
    University: Southern Medical University
    Nationality: Southern Medical University
    November 21, 2019 at 1:22 am

    Traveling all over the world has become a current lifestyle of modern individuals nowadays. Different people hold different views about whether it is necessary to go abroad to learn about other countries or not. Personally, I think it’s essential.

    On the one hand, those who consider it unnecessary to go abroad may believe that they are accessible to all the information from the Internet. And they think it would be more convenient to get the information from the Internet compared with going abroad because they can know about the foreign culture whenever and wherever possible. Moreover, they might think it is a huge expenditure of money, time and energy to go to other countries because they have to reserve airplane tickets and hotels as well as make travel plans and guides. What’s more, we can also make friends with foreigners via the information developed Internet. So, they think there is no need to go abroad.

    On the other hand, the supporters of traveling abroad may argue that learning about other countries only from TV and the Internet is insufficient.And only when we arrive in that country to experience local culture directly can we learn about what the real-life it is there. For example, we can acquire more details when we go shopping there or taste the local special snacks or communicate and interact with local people, which cannot come true only with the information from the Internet. Besides, in our travels, we can take part in the festival activities together with local people, which would be a unique experience to ourselves.

    In conclusion, I think traveling abroad is necessary and well-worthy, and it’s also a great memory and extraordinary experience of our life.

    November 21, 2019 at 5:22 pm

    Score: 55.5

    Issues:

    1. More than 60% of the sentences exceed 20 words. You must cut down the percentage to 20%-.

    Traveling all over the world has become a current/trendy lifestyle of [  wrong preposition] modern individuals nowadays. Different people hold different views about whether it is necessary to go abroad to learn about other countries or not. [ non-original content ]Personally, I think it[ unclear pronoun ]’s essential.

    On the one hand, those who consider it unnecessary to go abroad may believe that they are accessible to all the information from the Internet[  confusing sentence]. [ punctuation error with coordinating word ]And they think it[unclear pronoun/in such a context, simply put “getting information from the internet would be convenient”  ] would be more[ lack a comparison ] convenient to get the information[what info?  ] from the Internet compared with going abroad because they can know about the foreign culture whenever and wherever possible.[  very wordy sentence] Moreover, they might think it is a huge expenditure of money, time and energy to go to other countries because they have to reserve airplane tickets and [  wrong coordinating word]hotels [ punctuation error ]as well as make travel plans and guides.[ very wordy ] What’s more, we [ shift of person ]can also make friends with foreigners via the information developed[ unclear ] Internet. [  punctuation and coordinating word errors]So, they[ unclear pronoun ] think there[avoid using There Be sentence  ] is no need to go abroad.

    On the other hand, the supporters of traveling abroad may argue that learning about other countries only from TV and the Internet is insufficient. [ punctuation and coordinating word errors ]And only when we arrive in that country to experience[ article error ] local culture directly can we learn about what the real-life it is there. For example, we can acquire more details when we go shopping there[wrod repetition  ] [punctuation error  ]or taste the local special snacks [  punctuation error]or communicate and interact with [ article error ]local people, which cannot come true only with the information from the Internet. Besides, in our travels, we can take part in the festival activities together with[ article error ] local people, which would be a unique experience to ourselves[ wrong word ].

    In conclusion, I think traveling abroad is necessary and well-worthy, and it’s also a great memory and an extraordinary experience of [wrong preposition  ]our life/lives.

    liangningstella
    University: Southern Medical University
    Nationality: Southern Medical University
    November 22, 2019 at 1:11 am

    Traveling all over the world has become a current lifestyle in modern individuals. Different people hold different views about whether it is necessary to go abroad to learn about other countries or not. From my own point of view, I think it’s essential to go abroad to learn about other countries.

    On the one hand, those who consider it unnecessary to go abroad may believe that they are accessible to all kinds of information such as the famous buildings, the people’s life and the history of other countries from the Internet,and they think getting these information from the internet would be more convenient compared with going abroad. Moreover, they might think it would cost much money, time and energy to go to other countries because they have to reserve airplane tickets and hotels, as well as make travel plans in advance. What’s more, they can also make friends with foreigners via the technology-developed internet. Therefore,the opponents of traveling to other countries believe that going abroad is unnecessary.

    On the other hand, the supporters of traveling abroad may argue that learning about other countries only from TV and the Internet is insufficient, and only when we arrive in that country to experience local culture directly can we learn about what the real-life it is there. For example, we can acquire more details when we walk around the streets, taste the local special snacks and communicate with local people, which cannot come true only with the information from the Internet. Besides, in our travels, we can take part in the festival activities and enjoy our time together with local people, which would be a unique experience to us.

    In conclusion, I think traveling abroad is necessary and well-worthy, and it’s also a great memory and extraordinary experience to our lives.

    January 3, 2020 at 2:22 am

    Score: 49.9

    Issues:

    1. About 55% of the sentences exceed 20 words.

    Sorry, I won’t work on your essay since you failed to work on the main issue mentioned in the last revision (more than 60% of the sentences exceed 20 words).