Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. Others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are best at or that they find the most interesting. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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May 31, 2019 at 2:02 pm
Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. Others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are best at or that they find the most interesting. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
From primary school to high school, students are always required to learn several subjects. Some people hold the view that they should do their best at every subject without considering which one they like best or have the most talent in, while others would argue that they should spend most of their time on the one they are most interested in. My firm conviction is that students should learn all the subjects hard, but may spend more time on what they like.
In many people’s eyes, it’s important to learn all the subjects well. Getting good grades at all subjects is very important, for it can be the guarantee of admission to top universities. It seems that those who can get high marks in all subjects always do better in their overall scores than who needs to make up for their weakness with their advantages. What’s more, knowledge before tertiary education is considered to be common sense, which is necessary for all the students to learn no matter what subject they are going to embark on.
Meanwhile, others don’t think students should waste time on what they are not interested in. If students who find science difficult can focus on learning foreign languages, they can improve their language skills more quickly and get admitted to top universities without taking exams in science, which is a fantastic way of taking full use of advantages and avoiding drawback.
From my perspective, students should work hard on all subjects to gain more common knowledge about the world and the society which may come at hand any time and support their future career or study. But they can spend more time on the subject they like and want to do more exploration in, for they are more likely to gain achievements in these fields with their talent and passion.
June 5, 2019 at 9:20 pmScore: 68
Suggestions for Improvement
- Convert passive sentences into their active counterparts;
- Shorten/split sentences exceeding 20 words.
Problems Highlight
From primary school to high school, students are always required to learn several subjects. Some people hold the view that they should do their best at every subject without considering which one they like best or have the most talent in, while others would argue that they should spend most of their time on the one they are most interested in [Ending sentence with preposition]. My firm conviction is that students should learn all the subjects hard, but may spend more time on what they like.
In many people’s eyes, it’s [conventions issue] important to learn all the subjects well. Getting good grades at [wrong preposition]all subjects is very important, for it can be the guarantee of admission to top universities. It seems that those who can get high marks in all subjects[Repetition] always do better in their overall scores than who needs to make up for their weakness with their advantages.[Verbose] What’s more, knowledge before tertiary education is considered to be common sense, which is necessary for all the students to learn no matter what subject they are going to embark on.[Verbose/Ending sentence with preposition]
Meanwhile, others don’t think students should waste time on what they are not interested in.[Ending sentence with preposition] If students who find science difficult can focus on learning foreign languages, they can improve their language skills more quickly and get admitted to top universities without taking exams in science, which is a fantastic way of taking[wrong word] full use of advantages and avoiding drawback. [Verbose]
From my perspective, students should work hard on all subjects to gain more common knowledge about the world and the society which may come at hand any time and support their future career or study. [Verbose] But they can spend more time on the subject they like and want to do more exploration in, for they are more likely to gain achievements in these fields with their talent and passion. [Verbose]
Comment: There are many remaining issues, but it is too hard for me to work on them with many lengthy sentences. I will work on them once you fix the issues noted above. Thank you!
