If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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  • huangwenyu
    University: high school
    Nationality: China
    September 13, 2020 at 10:06 am

    If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

    Recently ,the controversial debate that if people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying ,has become instance among the public .Some people hold the opposite viewpoint but there are others including me hold the agreeable opinion and reasons are list as follow .

    The primary reason for my propensity the belief is that people escape the reality who always has a mind that second offer can be better or more satisfying  .Have to acknowleadge that most of people has mental issue who has a word that I will take a better offer so I abandon this job.I have seen a report said that there are more and more youth stay home and dont take a job because the job is under his expection .I have consin who graduated for years but he has to live with his parents because there is a solid belief word in his mind that he is worth the better and more satisfying job . I believe that most people as my consin have the ability to take a job but they cant entrust they is a normal person .

    The second reason why I hold the above statement is that a person is looking down some kinds of job so he or she will act as the opposite point do  .It means that there are most truse that some jobs are lowly .In my high school political bool, there is a sentience said that all kind of job is evenly .And there is a famous instance is that a person who eagers a job which allow he or her stay in the office but the wage is lower that the washing cups job paid .So if a person has look down some job ,thence he or she will think the next job is more satisfying

    So I agree with the point not only people escape the reality that he or she is a normal person ,but also people should thick every kind of job is equality.

    September 16, 2020 at 9:09 pm

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