In many countries, there has been an increase in social problems involving teenagers in recent years. Many people believe that this is due to modern lifestyles because parents spend more and more time at work and have less time to supervise their children. To what extent do you believe this is true?
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February 6, 2020 at 9:05 am
In many countries, there has been an increase in social problems involving teenagers in recent years. Many people believe that this is due to modern lifestyles because parents spend more and more time at work and have less time to supervise their children. To what extent do you believe this is true?
In modern time and society, there is an escalating tendency that youth come to misbehave in social area. Some mortals deem it owes to the lack of the custody from parents, who are inundated with loads of heavy works. there is no doubt that I am firmly back up with this illustration.
It is true that assorted reasons trigger behavioral and interpersonal issues among children. Teachers and schools should be blamed for teenagers’ bad behavior, due to the fact that they are too lenient to orient youngsters’ conduction. Cutting-edge technology is also responsible for phenomenal problems related to children. These kinds of electronic devices pose a threat to the formative process of interactive know-how, which should have been augmented during adolescence.
However, the radical issue of children misbehavior lies in parental care. Evidently, raising a child in modern metropolis seems increasingly costly. In order to build up the backbone for the whole family, both of the parents have no choice but to throw themselves into working, while they do not realize the attention paid to kids as well as the interaction with teachers has shrunk sharply. Children who receive less tenderness from unstable family are more likely to grow violence within their mind, that is, to become disruptive students in school, thus making it arduous for school regulators to manage this situation. Meanwhile, there are fewer disciplines and structure at home, while family is the best place to cultivate children about moral issues and value notions. The deficiency of awareness in alternative educating will impair youngsters’ social-oriented abilities in the long run.
In conclusion, despite many aspects of reasons leading to children social behavior, the most significant factor would be parental issues.
February 14, 2020 at 8:44 pmScore: 48.7
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February 15, 2020 at 2:48 pmThere is an escalating tendency that youth come to misbehave in modern society. Some mortals deem it owes to the lack of custody from effortful-work-loaded parents. There is no doubt that I am back up with this illustration.
Several reasons trigger behavioral and interpersonal issues among children. Teachers and schools should account for teenagers’ bad behavior, by virtue of they are too lenient to orient youngsters’ conduction. Cutting-edge technology is also responsible for phenomenal problems related to children. These electronic devices have threatened the formative process of interactive know-how during adolescence.
On the flipside, the deep-seated issue of children’s misbehavior lies in parental care. It is evident that raising a child in the modern metropolis seems much more costly. Parents both have to exert every effort into work to build up the backbone for the whole family. They do not, however, realize the attention paid to kids and the interaction with teachers has shrunk. Children who receive less tenderness from unstable family are more likely to grow violence within their mind. To be specific, they become more disruptive in school, thus making it arduous for school regulators to manage. Meanwhile, there are fewer disciplines at home, the best place to cultivate children about moral issues and value notions. Deficiency of awareness in alternative educating will impair youngsters’ abilities in the long run.
In conclusion, despite many aspects of reasons leading to children’s social behavior, the most significant factor would be parental issues.
February 20, 2020 at 7:40 pmScore: 50
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- More than 10% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
There is an escalating tendency that youth come to misbehave in modern society [ unfactual statement]. Some mortals [wrong word ]deem it owes[grammatical error ] to the lack of custody from effortful-work-loaded[wrong word ] parents. There is no doubt that[THERE BE redundant ] I am back up with this illustration[wrong word ].
Several reasons trigger[tense error ] behavioral and interpersonal issues among children. [ lack organic connection from the prior sentence]Teachers and schools should account for teenagers’ bad behavior, by virtue of [wrong phrase ]they are too lenient to orient [wrong word ]youngsters’ conduction[ wrong word]. Cutting-edge technology is also responsible for phenomenal[unclear] problems related to children. These [unclear pronoun ]electronic devices [unmentioned ]have threatened the formative process of interactive know-how [ unclear]during adolescence.
On the flipside, the deep-seated issue of children’s misbehavior lies in parental care[unclear ]. It is evident that raising a child in the[article error ] modern metropolis seems [conflicting with ‘evident’ ]much more costly. Parents both [disposition ]have to exert every effort into[preposition error ] work to build up the backbone for the whole family. They do not, however, realize the attention paid to kids and the interaction with teachers has shrunk. Children who receive less tenderness from unstable family are more likely to grow violence within their mind. To be specific, they become more disruptive in school, thus making it arduous for school regulators to manage. Meanwhile, there are fewer disciplines at home, the best place to cultivate children about moral issues and value notions. Deficiency of awareness in alternative educating will impair youngsters’ abilities in the long run.
In conclusion, despite many aspects of reasons leading to children’s social behavior, the most significant factor would be parental issues.
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March 13, 2020 at 1:53 pmThere is an escalating tendency that youth have social problems in modern time. Some people deem it owing to the lack of custody from their parents loaded with heavy works. It is no doubt that I am back up with this viewpoint.
Several reasons triggered behavioral and interpersonal issues among children. For one thing, teachers and schools should account for teenagers’ bad behavior, because they are too lenient to direct youngsters’ behavior. For another, cutting-edge technology is also responsible for bunches of problems related to children. For example, electronic devices have threatened the formative process of interactive experience during adolescence.
On the flipside, the scarcity of parental care accounts for most of the reasons why children encounter social issues. It is evident that raising a child in modern metropolis is much more costly. Both of the parents have to exert every effort to build up the backbone for the whole family. They do not, however, realize the attention paid to kids and the frequency commuting to teachers have shrunk. Under this situation, children who receive less warmth are more likely to be more violent students. To be specific, they may become more disruptive in school, thus making it arduous for school regulators to manage. Meanwhile, there are fewer disciplines at home, where parents are supposed to cultivate children about moral issues and values. Deficiency of parental instruction will impair youngsters’ cognition and finesse in the long run.
In conclusion, despite many aspects of reasons leading to children’s inappropriate behavior, parental issues should be the most significant factor.
March 16, 2020 at 1:37 amScore: 54
There is an escalating [wrong word ] tendency that [ article error ] youth have social problems in modern time[word form error ] . Some people deem it owing [rephrase ] to the lack of custody [ wrong word ] from their parents loaded with heavy works[word form error ] . It is no doubt that I am[ grammatical error ] back up with[ preposition error ] this viewpoint.
Several reasons triggered[ wrong word ] behavioral and interpersonal issues among children. [ logically disconnected from the prior sentence ] For one thing, teachers and schools should account for[ wrong phrase ] teenagers’ bad behavior,[ grammatical error ] because they are too lenient to [ grammatical error ] direct youngsters’ behavior. For another, cutting-edge technology is also responsible for bunches of problems related to children. For example, electronic devices have threatened the formative process of interactive experience during adolescence.
On the flipside, the scarcity of parental care accounts for most of the reasons why children encounter social issues. It is evident that raising a child in modern metropolis is much more costly. Both of the parents have to exert every effort to build up the backbone for the whole family. They do not, however, realize the attention paid to kids and the frequency commuting to teachers have shrunk. Under this situation, children who receive less warmth are more likely to be more violent students. To be specific, they may become more disruptive in school, thus making it arduous for school regulators to manage. Meanwhile, there are fewer disciplines at home, where parents are supposed to cultivate children about moral issues and values. Deficiency of parental instruction will impair youngsters’ cognition and finesse in the long run.
In conclusion, despite many aspects of reasons leading to children’s inappropriate behavior, parental issues should be the most significant factor.
March 24, 2020 at 1:58 pmThere is no question that standards of behavior among teenagers have fallen. Some people deem that the principle cause is lack of custody from their working parents. It is no doubt that I firmly back up this viewpoint.
There are several reasons why children suffer from behavioral and interpersonal issues. For one thing, teachers and schools may not handle the problem appropriately. This is due to the fact that they are too lenient to direct youngsters’ behavior. For another, cutting-edge technology is also responsible for teenagers’ problems. For example, electronic devices have threatened adolescents’ interactive experience in the formative years.
However, we can deduce that the scarcity of parental care accounts for most reasons of adolescent social issues. It is evident that raising a child in modern metropolis is much more costly. Both of the parents have to exert every effort to build up the backbone for the whole family. They do not, however, realize the attention paid to kids and interaction with teachers have shrunk. While it is very often the case that children who receive less warmth are prone to be more violent students. In fact, they may become more disruptive in school, thus making it arduous for school regulators to manage. Likewise, parents may fail to make disciplines at home, where they should cultivate children about moral issues and values. Deficiency of parental instruction will impair youngsters’ cognition and finesse in the long run.
In conclusion, despite many aspects of reasons of children’s inappropriate behavior, parents should bear most of the responsibilities for the actions of their teenaged children.
March 25, 2020 at 3:16 pmScore: 58.8
There is no question that standards of behavior among [ preposition error ] teenagers have fallen. Some people deem that the principle [ wrong word ] cause is [article error ] lack of custody from their working parents. It is no doubt that I firmly back up this viewpoint.
There are several reasons why children suffer from behavioral and interpersonal issues. For one thing, teachers and schools may not handle these problems appropriately. This is due to the fact that they are too lenient to direct youngsters’ behavior. For another, cutting-edge technology is also responsible for teenagers’ problems. For example, electronic devices have threatened adolescents’ interactive experience in/during their formative years.
However, we can deduce that the scarcity of parental care accounts for most
reasons ofadolescent social issues. It is evident that raising a child in [article error ] modern metropolis is much more costly. Bothof theparents have to exert every effort to build up the backbone for the whole family. They do not, however, realize that the attention paid to kids and interaction with teachers have shrunk. While it is very often the case that children who receive less warmth are prone to become [ dull BE verb ] more violent students. In fact, they may become more disruptive in school, thus making it arduous for school regulators to manage. Likewise, parents may fail to make disciplines at home, where they should cultivate children about moral issues and values. As a result,Ddeficiency of parental instruction will impair youngsters’ cognition and finesse in the long run.In conclusion, despite many
aspects ofreasons of/for children’s inappropriate behavior, parents should bear most of the responsibilities for the actions of their teenagedchildren[repetition ] .March 25, 2020 at 3:25 pmFinal revision. Good job!
