In some countries around the world men and women are having children late in life, what are the reasons for this development? What are the effects on society and family life?

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  • Daisy Yu
    University: GNNU
    Nationality: China
    September 15, 2020 at 9:20 am

    In some countries around the world men and women are having children late in life, what are the reasons for this development? What are the effects on society and family life?

    Different from early times, young couples living in present day prefer to have children late in life, which, however, has caused some impacts on this society and their family life. There are several factors contributing to this phenomenon.

    On the one hand, due to the fact that more and more companies are showing their preference to those who have a higher level degree, an increasing number of people choose to study further in order to meet the requirements of their ideal career. Being immersed in their study, people have less time and energy to make plans for future family life, including rearing a child, which results in a delay in childbirth.

    On the other hand, the high living expense of modern life has stressed many young couples, and this may make them hesitate to have a child very early after they set up a family. Considering about the spending on raising a child, young couple might opt for deposit, and won’t choose to have a children until the deposit covers the expense for a kid’s education or life.

    However, the trend of having a child late in life has some negative effects both on society and family life. For example, it may quicken population ageing, which directly leads to a shortage of labor force. It may also increase a lot of burnden on young couples as they have to face the caring need of elderly family members.

    To sum up, the delay in childbirth is mainly attributed to the needs of people’s further study and the stress of their economic situation, and the problems arising from this delay should not be ignored.

    September 23, 2020 at 9:28 pm

    Score: ungraded

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    1. About 70% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. About 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

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    Daisy Yu
    University: GNNU
    Nationality: China
    September 25, 2020 at 2:19 pm

    Unlike early times, young couples  living in present day prefer to have youngests late in life. There are several factors contributing to this phenomenon, and it has caused some impacts on this society and their family life

    First of all, because more and more companies are showing their preference to those who have a higher level degree, an increasing number of people choose to study further to meet the requirements of their ideal career. Being immersed in their study, people have less time and energy to make plans for future family life, including rearing a child, which results in a delay in childbirth.

    In addition, the modern life’s high living expense has stressed many young couples, which may make them hesitate to have a child very early after they set up a family. Considering the spending on raising a child, young couples might opt to save money first, and will not choose to have a child until the savings covers the expense for a child’s education or life.

    However, having a child late in life has some negative effects on society and family life. One is that it may quicken population ageing, which directly leads to a shortage of labor force. It may also increase a lot of burden on couples as they have to face a huge generation gap. They might already be seniors and their children are still teenages and they may often have arguments over many things due to differences in interests.

    To sum up, the delay in childbirth is mainly attributed to the needs of people’s further study and the stress of their economic situation, and the problems arising from this delay should not be ignored.

    October 1, 2020 at 5:44 pm

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. About 65% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. About 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.