In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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  • wu
    University: Hangzhou Dianzi University
    Nationality: 中国
    March 5, 2021 at 12:42 pm

    In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

    In some people’s opinion, having a home is more significant than renting one. There are some reasons for this phenomenon.

    Firstly, owning a home gives a sense of belonging for people compared to renting one. People think that a place with a house is their home, but if they rent a house, they may think they live in other’s home. For example, people who have their own house can decorate it as they like. However, if they rent one, they have to listen to landlord.

    What’s more, we need a stable life to develop ourselves. Living in own house gives us a stable environment. We don’t have to think about whether the owner of the house will kick us out. After all, the house belong us forever. We will be more focused on our work or study.

    I don’t think it is a positive situation if everyone wants to have their own house. The case is that the price of house may increase if everyone wants to buy a house. The needing for houses enlarges but the amount of house is limited so that the price rises. Then, someone who has less money can not afford a house. For example, recently, house prices are rising and people’s happiness index is getting lower and lower.

    All in all, people should change their view about buying a house or renting a house. Although there are many advantages for buying a house, we can not ignore the bad impact of buying a house on society.

     

    March 5, 2021 at 5:36 pm

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    wu
    University: Hangzhou Dianzi University
    Nationality: 中国
    March 6, 2021 at 4:30 am

    In some people’s opinion, having a home is more significant than renting one. There are some reasons that houses give people a sense of belonging and stability leading to this phenomenon.However, I think this phenomenon cause adverse effects to society.

    Firstly, owning a home gives a sense of belonging for people compared to renting one. People think that a place with a house is their home, but if they rent a house, they may think they live in the home of other people. For example, people who have their own houses can decorate it as they like. However, if they rent one, they have to comply with the request of their landlords.

    What’s more, people need a stable life to develop ourselves. Living in the own house gives us a stable environment. People don’t have to think about whether the owner of the house will kick us out. After all, the house belongs us forever. We will be more focused on our work or study.

    These reasons are positive but it is not a good situation if everyone wants to have their own house. The case is that the price of the house may increase if everyone wants to buy it. The needing for housing enlarges but the amount of housing is limited so that the price rises. Then, someone who has less money can not afford a house. For example, recently, house prices are rising, and then people’s happiness index is getting lower.

    All in all, people should change their view about buying a house or renting it. Although there are many advantages to buying a house, we can not ignore the negative impact of it on society.

    March 7, 2021 at 3:55 am

    In some people’s opinion, having a home (is more significant)[ replace BE+adj with verb  ] than renting one. There are some reasons that houses give people a [ I believe the  ] sense of belonging and stability [ in life  ] [ are primary factors behind  ] leading to this phenomenon. However, I think this phenomenon [ I also believe that this trend can  ] cause adverse effects to society.

    Firstly, owning a home[, rather than renting one,   ] gives[/brings one   ] a sense of belonging for people compared to renting one. People think that a place with [ since  ] a house is [  regarded by many as ] their home, but if [ . If  ] they rent [grammatical error   ] a house, they may[ grammatical error  ] think they live in the[ a  ] home of [ owned by  ] other people. For example, people who have their own houses can decorate it as they like. However, if they rent [grammatical error   ] one, they have[grammatical error   ] to comply with the request of their landlords.

    [What’s more, people need a stable life to develop ourselves[shift of person  ] . Living in (the own )[ unclear  ] house gives us[ shift of person  ] a stable environment. People[ shift of person  ] don’t have to think about whether the owner of the house will kick us out. After all, the house belongs us forever. We will be more focused on our work or study.][confusing paragraph due to shift of person   ]

    (These reasons are positive)[unclear   ] but it is[grammatical error   ] not a good situation if everyone wants[ grammatical error  ] to have their own house. The case[new information introduced without preparation   ] is that the price of the [ article error  ] house may increase if everyone wants to buy it[unclear pronoun   ] . The needing [ word form error  ] for housing enlarges but the amount of housing is[ use concrete verb to replace BE verb  ] limited so that the price rises. Then, someone who has less money can not[word form error   ] afford a house. For example, recently, house prices are[ grammatical error  ] rising, and then people’s happiness index is getting lower.

    All in all, people should change their view[  word form error ] about buying a house or renting it. Although there are many advantages to[ wrong preposition  ] buying a house, we can not[word form error   ] ignore the negative impact of it[ unclear pronoun  ] on society.