In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people.Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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It is a growing trend that people today are crazy about (are increasingly keen to buy) buying houses and apartments rather than renting[ incomplete sentence  ][ sweeping statement; this is not the case in Japan  ]. There are various reasons why people’s living habits have changed, and I reckon (this change has)[ inconsistency in word form  ] both advantages and disadvantages[specify advantages and disadvantages  ].

[Missing transitory word   ]Some people want to settle down, so buying (a house or an apartment)[  inconsistency in word form ] could help them start a family life successfully. Instead of moving around and changing neighbors endlessly, they can gradually get used to the local community and local lifestyle[ s  ]. In some countries, only becoming the ownerships[ word form error  ] of a house, people [ only homeowners  ]can send their children to certain public schools. Therefore buying a property is something they must do,[punctuation error   ]  otherwise their children will not have access to educational opportunities.

In my opinion, this trend has both positive and negative effects.  On the one hand, if more citizens are[grammatical error/subjunctive   ] inclined to purchase their[ a  ] home ownerships, they are more likely[  grammatical error ] to lead a steady life, which is beneficial both to [. Indeed, home gratification can benefit   ]local government and companies,[businesses   ] because they[ unclear pronoun  ] [are happy to   ]pay taxes and[ when  ] they work stably[ their jobs remain stable  ]. Besides, compared with the (floating population)[ ?  ], stable life stands for[ / means ] lower crime rates as dwellers who have bought houses have jobs with salaries, [ punctuation error  ]they are able to pay for basic needs and less prone to commit crimes[ unclear  ].

On the other hand, the prevailing trend of home buying will[sweeping statement/use conditional writing   ] lead to [soaring home prices   ]fierce competition in the real estate market, [ punctuation error  ]then its price will become unreasonable. Many [ As a result, many  ]young people will[ use conditional writing  ] find it difficult to buy a home by themselves. This pressure might push them to move to other places where [ homes are   ] home ownership are affordable . And [  punctuation error with the use of coordinating conjunction ]this[ unclear pronoun  ] will lead to (brain drain and loss of labour)[unclear   ], which [ hinders  ]is detrimental to the local labour market and the local economy[ word form error  ] development. (After all, talents are the core competitiveness of a city)[ This is Chinese  ].

In conclusion, I agree that there are lots of benefits to purchasing property [ can have umpteen benefits  ], but [ Even so,   ]I also believe that excessive attention on[ wrong preposition  ] real estate investment would bring our society some potential hazards.