In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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  • littlecobber
    University: YZU
    Nationality: China
    June 13, 2020 at 2:27 am

    In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

    First of all,with the rapid development of the Internet,information circulates swiftly among the world as well as the advanced technology of producing cars.Thus,the market of cars will be probably saturated due to the mass of production in the next twenty years,even the wealthiest person in the world won’t invest a large porpotion of his money into car industry.Two kinds of people are likely to be divided into groups;First group contains people who can not afford the car,the other one contains people who have got their own cars.So in this case,the requirement of cars will definitely reduced in the future.

    What’s more,environment problem is also one of the most important factor to be considered in this argument.The prodigious use of car leads to the huge environmental problems,such as air pollution,waste water,etc.When talking about the air polllution,the carbon dioxide will emerge in our mind.Cars can emit a plenty of carbon dioxide mixed with a few amount of solfide during the running time,which can cause not only the air pollution but also the global warming.Further more,many car faculties pull waste water which is produced by the process of making car component into river,just in order to save some fee of proceeding.To some extent,cutting down the amount of car production can protect our environment.

    Finally,nowadays,the government also advocates a more efficient and more convenient way in terms of transportation.Subways,undergound are established for the purposes stated above.Subway connects directly to the destination where you want to arrive while costing you just a little fee of transportation relatively.It can also spare you a lot of time in looking for car parks.Additonal,it can not be denied that traditional private cars may lose its market in the future,but if the nuclear or new energy cars are put into mass production,the number of the cars in use in the future will not be predictable.

    June 16, 2020 at 10:08 pm

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    1. About 100% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. About 50% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

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    littlecobber
    University: YZU
    Nationality: China
    June 17, 2020 at 1:56 am

    There have been a fierce debate among the given statement. Some of people say that it only takes about twenty years to see the decline of the cars in use. Others hold the contrary opinion. In my perspective, however, i agree with the former agrument.

    To begin with, due to the rapid development of Internet, information disseminates in a fast pace.
    Because of this,everyone has easy access to learn the advanced technology of producing vehicles.
    In that case, increasing production of cars will lead to market saturation. So vehicle industry is losing its competition and status in this world, which can cut down the profits they earn. Eventually, the car production in decades will decrease in a dramatic way.

    What’s more, mass production of vehicles can cause serious environmental problems. Air pollution
    and water waste take the dominant place among the problems. Carbon dioxide is the main gas which result in the global warming. As cars running on the road, it emits a plenty of carbon dioxide along with sulfur dioxide. Factories sprang up in the past few years. To avoid paying expensive fee of proceeding water, they just pull wasted water directly into the nearby river, which cause the damage of bio-diversity of fish kinds.

    Finally, the storage of oil and gas are running out. People haven’t found the best alternative fuel for vehicles’ motivation. The fuel we use nowadays consists of fossil fuel in the large proportion. Fossil fuel needs a long period of time to form, thus, demand for fuel will exceed supply in the future. It can’t be denied that governments encourage enormous investment in nuclear or new energy vehicle. But there still remaining a lot of factors to be taken into account, such as charge station and recycling problems.

    In summary, the tendency of the decrease of vehicles will not change in the next decades.

    June 17, 2020 at 9:58 pm

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    littlecobber
    University: YZU
    Nationality: China
    June 18, 2020 at 2:46 am

    The statement above has given rise to a dramatic dispute. People’s opinions varied from person to person. Some people say that it takes about two decade to see a reduction in the number of cars. However their thoughts suffer from both logical and factual fallacies.

    Firstly, with the development of societies, a upgrading of automobile industrial structure is undergoing.
    That means traditional cars will probably supplanted by new energy cars in the near future. Lacking fossil fuels and gases is no more a negative influence for vehicle production. For example, Tesla is the pioneer of new energy vehicles, using electricity to substitute petroleum. This can even enlarge the longevity of vehicles. So, the totally amount of vehicles will not decrease, it’s just that the ratio of conventional cars to new energy vehicles will change.

    Most opponents of my perspective hold view of that economic issues can also in favor of their argument.
    They consider that it is more and more difficult to get a lucrative job nowadays. People are less likely to afford a car under the pressure of mortgage. Nevertheless, the government has made a statement on cutting down price of new energy cars in recent years. They encourage us to use renewable sources. Other
    policies also have been established to help citizens to afford a car, such as providing an allowance for them.

    Last but not least, there is an increasing demands for vehicles among young generations. Old vehicles can not satisfy their discerning taste, which causes their pursuits of fashionable cars. Admittedly, public transportation is becoming more convenient and effective than ever. People will still try to buy vehicles, considering that an expensive car can illustrate their uncommon status.

    To summary, people’s enthusiasm about buying cars will by no means fade away. Although changes of the world are hard to anticipate, the whole picture can still be foreseed. And time can prove all of this.

    June 18, 2020 at 11:52 am

    I won’t work on your essay unless grammatical/logical errors are significantly reduced. Besides, use your own words to write your own ideas.

    littlecobber
    University: YZU
    Nationality: China
    June 18, 2020 at 2:46 pm

    It is not uncommon to see roads filled with vehicles in modern society since cars have been playing a vital role in our daily commute. In that case, some people anticipate that the number of cars will decline in the next two decades. In my perspective, however, the demand for vehicles will keep increasing regardless of other possible influences.

    To begin with, technology has developed at a fast pace, making the upgrading of car industry feasible. That means traditional cars will probably be replaced by new energy cars in the near future. Thus, lacking fossil fuels and gases can not result in the decrease of output of vehicles. For instance, Tesla is the leader of new energy vehicles, which substitutes petroleum for electricity. So, storage of conventional fuels can not confine the mass production of new energy cars, which suggests that the total amount of vehicles will not reduce, it’s just that the ratio of traditional cars to new energy vehicles changes.

    Additionally, opponents who are against my point of view consider that many people nowadays are suffering from financial problems. They argue that it is more and more difficult to get a car since people’s money has been used to pay back debts. But fortunately, the government has made a statement on cutting down price of new energy cars in recent years. In order to advocate the use of renewable sources, governments published many policies, including providing special allowances for citizens.

    Last but not least, there is an increasing demand for vehicles among young generations. Old vehicles can not satisfy their special taste. Young generations are looking for something which contains unique and fashionable elements. High-tech cars are just in line with the requirements. Admittedly, public transportation is becoming more convenient and effective than ever, which seems that there is no need for a private car. But in big cities, public transportation can often be crowded. People have to experience discomfort in relatively narrow space.

    In summary, people’s enthusiasm about purchasing cars will by no means fade away in the future.

    June 19, 2020 at 2:30 pm

    It is not uncommon to see roads filled with vehicles in modern society since cars have been playing a vital role in our daily commute. In that case, [ no logical connection with the prior sentence  ]some people anticipate that the number of cars will decline in the next two decades. In my perspective, however, the demand for vehicles will keep increasing regardless of other possible influences.

    To begin with, technology has developed at a fast pace, making the upgrading of car industry feasible[ bad topic sentence/write a topic sentence that directly responds to your thesis., i.e. Depletion of fossil fuels may lead to a significant reduction of cars  ]. That means [  that ]traditional cars will probably be replaced by new energy [new-energy   ]cars in the near future[  this does not support car use will reduce ]. (Thus, lacking fossil fuels and gases can not result in the decrease of output of vehicles.)[ unclear  ] For instance, Tesla is [,   ]the leader of new energy vehicles, which substitutes petroleum for electricity. So, storage of conventional fuels can not confine the mass production of new energy cars, which suggests that the total amount of vehicles will not reduce, it’s just that the ratio of traditional cars to new energy vehicles changes.

    Additionally, opponents who are against my point of view consider that many people nowadays are suffering from financial problems. They argue that it is more and more difficult to get a car since people’s money has been used to pay back debts. But fortunately, the government has made a statement on cutting down price of new energy cars in recent years. In order to advocate the use of renewable sources, governments published many policies, including providing special allowances for citizens.

    Last but not least, there is an increasing demand for vehicles among young generations. Old vehicles can not satisfy their special taste. Young generations are looking for something which contains unique and fashionable elements. High-tech cars are just in line with the requirements. Admittedly, public transportation is becoming more convenient and effective than ever, which seems that there is no need for a private car. But in big cities, public transportation can often be crowded. People have to experience discomfort in relatively narrow space.

    In summary, people’s enthusiasm about purchasing cars will by no means fade away in the future.