It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior?
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September 10, 2020 at 9:27 am
It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior?
It is difficult for parents and teachers to educate children about the difference between right and wrong, but it is essential to help children become good citizens. Although there are many measures for parents and tutors to choose, punishment is the most common method because of tradition or great efficiency. I agree that punishment is a great approach for guiding children under the consideration of their self-esteem.
Punishment works pretty well because of the sense of blame. Doing the wrong things is regular for children as they learn the distinction between right and wrong by identifying the responses from adults. After making lots of mistakes, they become mature both physically and mentally. Therefore, parents and teachers need more patience for the unavoidable process. They are able to classify the level of mistakes and match the appropriate punishment. Small mistakes can be ignored if children realize the unpleasant results and feel embarrassed.
Violence should be banned when children make mistakes, which may cause mental illness or disabilities. Parents and tutors should focus on the reasons why children do wrong things. Do they lack self-discipline? Or be influenced by bad students? Or copy the behavior in action movies or violent videos? Parents and teachers have to analyze the process of behavior changes occurred on children and provide specific advice or guidance for them. To emphasize the serious consequence, educators can regulate children to do some simple work like clean the house or classroom, do the voluntary job for a better neighborhood, or write an essay about his or her feeling about making mistakes to remind themselves doing the right things.
Above all, punishment can be used to educate children on the difference between right and wrong. However, the personal situation and self-esteem should be referenced by parents and teachers.
September 11, 2020 at 12:56 amScore: ungraded
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September 11, 2020 at 3:01 amEducating children about the difference between right and wrong is a tough task for parents and teachers. There are many measures to help children become good citizens. Punishment is one of the most common methods because of tradition or great efficiency. I believe that punishment should be adopted with the consideration of children’s self-esteem.
Punishment works pretty well because of the sense of blame. Doing the wrong things is regular for children as they learn the distinction between right and wrong by identifying the adults’ responses. After making lots of mistakes, they become mature mentally. Therefore, parents and teachers need more patience for the unavoidable process. They are able to classify the level of mistakes and match the appropriate punishment. If children have realized the unpleasant results and felt ashamed by their mistakes, parents and teachers would better forgive them.
Violence should be banned in any circumstances, because it may cause children’s unhealthy development. Parents and tutors should focus on the reasons why children do wrong things rather than using violence. Do they lack self-discipline? Or learn from bad students? Or copy the behavior in action movies or violent videos? Parents and teachers have to provide specific advice or guidance for children according to their conditions. There are some available simple punishments, such as cleaning the house or classroom, doing the voluntary job for a better neighborhood, or writing an apology letter. These punishments are able to teach them how to take responsibility.
Above all, punishment is an effective method to educate children on the difference between right and wrong, but personal situation and self-esteem should be referenced by parents and teachers.
September 11, 2020 at 3:07 amEducating children about the difference between right and wrong is a tough task for parents and teachers. [Lack of logical connection with the prior sentence ]There are many measures to help children become good citizens. Punishment is
one of the most common methods[such a method ]because of (tradition or great efficiency)[ unclear ]. [poor logical connection with the last sentence ]I believe that punishment should be adopted with the consideration of children’s self-esteem.Punishment works
prettywell because of (the sense of blame)[ unclear ]. Doing the wrong things is regular[wrong word ] for children as they learn the distinction between right and wrong by identifying the adults’ responses[poor logical connection ]. After making lots of mistakes, they become mature mentally. Therefore, parents and teachers need more patience for the unavoidable process. They are able to classify the level of mistakes and match the appropriate punishment. If children have realized the unpleasant results and felt ashamed by their mistakes, parents and teachers would better forgive them.Violence should be banned in any circumstances, because it may cause children’s unhealthy development. Parents and tutors should focus on the reasons why children do wrong things rather than using violence. Do they lack self-discipline? Or learn from bad students? Or copy the behavior in action movies or violent videos? Parents and teachers have to provide specific advice or guidance for children according to their conditions. There are some available simple punishments, such as cleaning the house or classroom, doing the voluntary job for a better neighborhood, or writing an apology letter. These punishments are able to teach them how to take responsibility.
Above all, punishment is an effective method to educate children on the difference between right and wrong, but personal situation and self-esteem should be referenced by parents and teachers.
September 11, 2020 at 3:14 amPartial revision [Almost all sentences are problematic.]
September 23, 2020 at 8:32 amI agree that punishment is necessary to help children learn the difference between right and wrong.
Firstly, if children know the bad behavior will lead to punishment, they can be more cautious before action to avoid punishment. For example, in my country, children drop rubbish in the playground will be punished to clean the toilet. In this way, students are encouraged to drop rubbish in right place. Secondly, punishment help children learn the bad consequences of breaking rules, which have a positive effect on their development in the future. When they become members of communities, they can understand the importance of obeying the laws in societies. For instance, juvenile delinquency like robbery and theft will contribute to life in prison. Finally, punishment is an effective way to correct children’s behavior, which has been using for thousands of years. The adequate experiences of impressive punishment shaped what we are today, we learn to take responsibility and self-regulated because we know the right behavior link to a better life.
In my opinion, punishment is kind of a process with several steps to help children learn the right behavior. The first step of punishment is always to correct attitude by apologies. Children should acknowledge that they do wrong things before they solve the problems or take the responsibilities by themselves rather than parents. During this step, Parents and teachers can provide some advice and guidance to help children to solve these problems. For example, if children broke a glass in the classroom, they should apologize to the students who are scared. They should also replace the glass by asking for help from parents. Then parents should calculate the budget link to a list of work that children can do to earn this money by themselves.
In conclusion, parents and teachers can complete punishment by steps to educate children about the right behavior.
September 23, 2020 at 7:55 pmI agree that punishment is necessary to help children learn the difference between right and wrong.
Firstly, if children know [ grammatical error/subjunctive ]the[ article error ] bad behavior will[absolute statement/use conditional writing ] lead to punishment, they can[grammatical error ] be more cautious before[ taking an ] action to avoid punishment. For example[misplaced ], in my country,[ for example, ] children drop rubbish in[wrong preposition ] the playground will[ grammatical error ] be punished to clean the toilet. In this way[ unclear ], students are encouraged to drop rubbish in[ article error ] right place.
Secondly, punishment help[ grammatical error ] children learn the bad consequences of breaking rules, which have a positive effect on their development[what development? ] in the future. When they become members of communities, they can understand the importance of obeying the [ article error ]laws
in societies. For instance, juvenile delinquency[ word form error ] like[informal writing ] robbery and theft will[absolute statement ] (contribute to)[ wrong phrase ] life in prison.Finally, punishment is an effective way to correct children’s behavior, which [ unclear pronoun ]has been using[ grammatical error] for thousands of years[provide a cultural context here; the history of the United States is only 200+ years ]. (The adequate experiences of impressive punishment)[ unclear ] shaped what we are today, [ punctuation error ]we learn to take responsibility and self-regulated[ grammatical error ] because we know the right behavior link [grammatical error/absolute statement ]to a better life[what is a better life? ].
In my opinion, punishment is kind of a process with several steps to help children learn the right behavior. The first step of punishment is
alwaysto (correct attitude by apologies)[unclear ]. Children should acknowledge that they do wrong things before they solve the problems or take the responsibilities by themselves rather than parents[wordy/unclear ]. During this step, Parents[ spelling error ] and teachers can provide some advice and guidance to help children to solve these problems[what problems? ]. For example, if children broke a glass in the classroom, they should [grammatical error ]apologize to the students who are scared. They should also replace the glass by asking for help from parents. Then parents should calculate (the budget link to a list of work)[ unclear ] that children can do to earn this[ wrong pronoun ] money by themselves.In conclusion, parents and teachers can (complete punishment by steps)[ unclear ] to educate children about the right behavior.
