It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
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September 15, 2022 at 12:26 pm
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
In contemporary society, with easier access to various types of information, people are more likely to know more about events happening around the world. There is a debate that whether people should take in the information that doesn’t affect their daily lives. Generally, I believe that it is very important that we know about events happening around the world.
First, gaining information from different fields helps cultivate our habits of critical thinking, and strengthens the bonds between people. There are usually different points of view on a controversial issue, which we can choose to take a position on. By making our own judgments, we can acquire the ability to think independently. Eventually, we draw our conclusions and synthesize our perspectives by thoroughly evaluating different opinions. During this process, we can both have a profound understanding of the event; but have deeper connections with people in other areas of the world. For instance, a cruel war between two countries may make people mourn and reflect at the same time.
Second, knowledge about events happening around the world helps us better understand the current situation we are in and make effort to improve it as much as we can. Nowadays, the rapid development of technology and society strengthens the connection between countries. Inevitably, we are affected by events happening elsewhere in the world, which seemingly have no effect on us. Thus, even the smallest effort we make might have a significant impact on others. For example, a friend of mine often checks the news about ocean pollution problems in South Africa. She seizes every opportunity to make contributions to solving it, such as raising money and joining a charity organization.
Admittedly, most events that happen elsewhere in the world don’t have any practical impact on our daily lives. It seems useless to waste our time and effort learning about them. However, it is vital that we are aware of what is going on around the world to better understand the place we are living in. Also, it prompts us to make effort to meet future challenges and make the world better.
September 16, 2022 at 3:11 pm(In contemporary society, with easier access to various types of information)[dangling modifier ], people are more likely to know more about events happening around the world. [missing logical connection between sentences ]There is a debate (that whether)[ grammatical error ] people should
take in[ use formal writing: acquire/attain ] the information that doesn’t affect their daily lives. Generally, I believe that (it is very important)[avoid using vague words ] that we know about [the ]events happening around the world[ repetition ].First, gaining information from different fields helps cultivate our habits of critical thinking, and strengthens the bonds between people. There are usually different points of view on a controversial issue, which we can choose to take a position on. By making our own judgments, we can acquire the ability to think independently. Eventually, we draw our conclusions and synthesize our perspectives by thoroughly evaluating different opinions. During this process, we can both have a profound understanding of the event; but have deeper connections with people in other areas of the world. For instance, a cruel war between two countries may make people mourn and reflect at the same time.
Second, knowledge about events happening around the world helps us better understand the current situation we are in and make effort to improve it as much as we can. Nowadays, the rapid development of technology and society strengthens the connection between countries. Inevitably, we are affected by events happening elsewhere in the world, which seemingly have no effect on us. Thus, even the smallest effort we make might have a significant impact on others. For example, a friend of mine often checks the news about ocean pollution problems in South Africa. She seizes every opportunity to make contributions to solving it, such as raising money and joining a charity organization.
Admittedly, most events that happen elsewhere in the world don’t have any practical impact on our daily lives. It seems useless to waste our time and effort learning about them. However, it is vital that we are aware of what is going on around the world to better understand the place we are living in. Also, it prompts us to make effort to meet future challenges and make the world better.
September 16, 2022 at 3:16 pmPartial revision. Fix the same/similar problems in your essay and then resubmit it.
September 17, 2022 at 4:25 amNowadays the world is getting smaller because of the development of technology and globalization. Thus, people are more closely connected and also better informed about events happening around the world. Generally, I believe that people should keep up with current affairs even if many of them don’t affect people’s lives.
First, gaining information from different fields helps cultivate our habits of critical thinking, and strengthens the bonds between people. There are usually different points of view on a controversial issue, which we can choose to take a position on. By making our own judgments, we can acquire the ability to think independently. Eventually, we draw our conclusions and form objective attitudes by thoroughly evaluating different opinions. During this process, we can both have a profound understanding of the events, and have deeper connections with people in other areas of the world.
Second, knowledge about events happening around the world helps us broaden our horizons and make effort to improve the current situation as much as we can. Nowadays, the rapid development of technology and society strengthens the connection between nations. Inevitably, we are affected by events happening elsewhere in the world. Thus, even the smallest effort we make might have a significant impact on others. For example, a friend of mine often checks the news about ocean pollution problems in South Africa. She seizes every opportunity to make contributions to solving it, such as raising money and joining a charity organization, which has encouraged more people around her to join the organization and make joint efforts.
Admittedly, most events that happen elsewhere in the world don’t have any practical impact on our daily lives. It seems useless to waste our time and effort learning about them. However, it is vital that we are aware of what is going on around the world to better understand the current situation. Also, it prompts us to make effort to meet future challenges and make the world better.
To sum up, people ought to know about global events, because it promotes the development of both individuals and society.
September 17, 2022 at 4:42 pmNowadays the world is getting smaller[factural error; you may put ‘ Thomas Friedman, an MIT History professor, argues that the world has become flattened ] because of
thedevelopment of technology[ technological development ]and globalization.Thus,[As a result of this trend, ] people are more closely connected andalsobetter informed about [the ]events happening around the world.Generally,I believe that people should keep up with current affairs even if many of them don’t affect people’s lives.First, gaining information from different fields helps cultivate[people’s ]
our habits ofcritical thinking [ habits ],and strengthensthe bonds between [ them ]people. There are usually different points of view on a controversial issue, which we can choose to take a position on. By making our own judgments, we can acquire the ability to think independently. Eventually, we draw our conclusions and form objective attitudes by thoroughly evaluating different opinions. During this process, wecan both have[ develop ]a profound understanding of the [ global ]events, [as well as ]and havedeeper connections with people in other areas of the world.Second, [ the ]knowledge
about[derived from the ]events happening around the world helps us broaden our horizons[, thereby allowing us to ]andmake effort to improve the current situation as much as we can. Nowadays, the rapid development of technology and society strengthens the connection[s ] between nations. Inevitably, we are affected by [ the ]events (happening elsewhere in the world)[repetition ]. Thus, even the smallest effort we make mighthave a[ could significantly ]significantimpactonothers[ unclear word ]. For example, a friend of mine often checks the news about [ the ]ocean pollution problems in South Africa. She seizes every opportunity tomake contributions to solving[ solve ] it, such as raising money and joining a charity organization, which has encouraged more people around her to join the organizationand make joint efforts.[ split the lengthy sentence ]Admittedly, most events that (happen elsewhere in the world)[ repetition ] don’t have any practical impact on our daily lives. [ poor sentence connection
]It seems useless to waste our time and effort[, so ]learning about them [seems to waste our time and efforts ]. However, it is vital that we are aware of what is going on around the world [, which helps us ]to better understand the current situation. Also, it[ unclear pronoun ] prompts us to make effort tomeet[address ] future challengesand make the world better.To sum up, people ought to know about global events, because it[unclear pronoun ] promotes[ /facilitates ] the development of both individuals and society.
September 17, 2022 at 8:18 pmFinal revision
