It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.

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  • malatuzitui
    University: Beijing Forestry University
    Nationality: China
    November 26, 2021 at 3:56 am

    It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.

    The length of working hours is one of the most vital factors affecting working efficiency. Some might approve shorter work hours with rests interspersed among is more worker-friendly than longer ones. However, from my point of view, I agree with the statement.

    According to the equal collected working hours, more concentrated time means more consecutive time, resulting in more choices for you to spend your personal life. The length of off-duty time wouldn’t limit your time-consuming trip. You can go for a vacation at the seaside or hike with your family and friends. All those activities can not only create some precious memory that makes your relationship closely, but also enable you to rest and refresh yourself. On the contrary, the fixed commute time splits your block time into fragments which tend to be missed unknowingly. For example, one finishes working at 17:00 and go to bed at 22:00. Supposed that 4 hours are spent on dinner, chores, or likes that, you might dismiss the left 1 hour while swiping your phone.

    In addition, successive and long work hour has a positive impact on productivity. With admitted work hours, People can arrange their time to achieve more complicated and challenging tasks which take more time but respond with higher rewards. Conversely, the pattern of shorter work hours has two potential problems. First, employees have to restart the unfinished work which wastes time and decreases efficiency. Because except for robots who can get to work straight away, people need time to focus their minds on work. Secondly, unfinished works during off-duty time causes anxiety to some. To avoid having unfinished work hanging over themselves, people will drop tasks that cannot be done within working hours. Consequently, enthusiasm for work becomes tempered and the long-term interests of firms suffer.

    I believe longer work hours with more successive off-duty hours can promote efficiency and arouse workers’ passion for more meaningful tasks to make the whole society more productive.

    November 29, 2021 at 1:33 pm

    The length (word choice error) of working hours is one of the most vital factors affecting working (delete) efficiency. Some might approve (simplify) shorter work hours with rests interspersed among (simplify) is more worker-friendly than longer ones (delete). However, from my point of view, I agree with the statement (too vague, what do you agree with and why?).

    According to the equal collected working hours, more concentrated time means more consecutive time, resulting in more choices for you to spend your personal life. The length of off-duty time wouldn’t limit your time-consuming trip. You can go for a vacation at the seaside or hike with your family and friends. All those activities can not only create some precious memory that makes your relationship closely, but also enable you to rest and refresh yourself. On the contrary, the fixed commute time splits your block time into fragments which tend to be missed unknowingly. For example, one finishes working at 17:00 and go to bed at 22:00. Supposed that 4 hours are spent on dinner, chores, or likes that, you might dismiss the left 1 hour while swiping your phone.

    In addition, successive and long work hour has a positive impact on productivity. With admitted work hours, People can arrange their time to achieve more complicated and challenging tasks which take more time but respond with higher rewards. Conversely, the pattern of shorter work hours has two potential problems. First, employees have to restart the unfinished work which wastes time and decreases efficiency. Because except for robots who can get to work straight away, people need time to focus their minds on work. Secondly, unfinished works during off-duty time causes anxiety to some. To avoid having unfinished work hanging over themselves, people will drop tasks that cannot be done within working hours. Consequently, enthusiasm for work becomes tempered and the long-term interests of firms suffer.

    I believe longer work hours with more successive off-duty hours can promote efficiency and arouse workers’ passion for more meaningful tasks to make the whole society more productive.

    December 1, 2021 at 12:21 pm

    Partial Revision (please fix similar errors, revise whole essay, and resubmit)

    malatuzitui
    University: Beijing Forestry University
    Nationality: China
    December 3, 2021 at 4:49 am

    The length(I did’t correct the word, cuz I cannot find the right one) of working hours is one of the most vital factors affecting efficiency. Some approve short work hours interspersed with breaks are more worker-friendly than longer ones. However, from my point of view, I tend to have long work hours.

    According to the equal collected working hours, concentrated time means it is consecutive, resulting in more choices to spend your personal life. The length of off-duty time wouldn’t limit your time-consuming trip. You can go for a vacation at the seaside or hike with your family and friends. All those activities do not only create some precious memory that makes your relationship close but also enable you to rest and refresh yourself. On the contrary, the fixed commute time splits block time into fragments tending to be missed unknowingly. For example, one finishes working at 17:00 and goes to bed at 22:00. Supposed that 4 hours spent on dinner, chores, and such, you will most likely spend the left 1 hour while swiping your phone.

    In addition, successive and long work hour has a positive impact on productivity. With admitted work hours, People can arrange their time freely to achieve complicated and challenging tasks which take time but respond with high rewards. Conversely, in terms of short work hours, the advantage is lost on the account of two potential problems. First, employees have to restart the unfinished work that wastes time and decreases efficiency. Because except for robots getting to work straight away, people need time to focus their minds on work. Secondly, unfinished work causes anxiety to some. To avoid unfinished work hanging over themselves, people will drop tasks that cannot be done within working hours. Consequently, enthusiasm for work becomes tempered. Then the long-term interests of firms suffer.

    I believe longer work hours with more continuous off-duty hours can promote efficiency and arouse workers’ passion for more meaningful tasks to make the whole society more productive.

    • This reply was modified 5 days, 13 hours ago by malatuzitui.
    December 3, 2021 at 1:47 pm

    The length (amount) of working hours is one of the most vital factors affecting efficiency. Some approve (argue) shorter work hours interspersed with breaks (delete) are more worker-friendly than longer ones (delete). However, from my point of view, (delete) I tend to have (prefer) long work hours (because…).

    According to the equal collected working hours (unclear what this means), concentrated time (word choice error) means it is consecutive, resulting in more choices to spend your personal life (this whole sentence needs to be simplified). The length of off-duty time (simplify) wouldn’t (do not use contractions) limit your time-consuming trip (word choice error / unclear). You can go for a vacation at the seaside or hike with your family and friends. All those activities do not only (delete) create some (delete) precious memory (memories) that makes your relationship close (simplify) but also (and) enable you to rest and refresh yourself. On the contrary, the fixed commute time splits block time into fragments tending to be missed unknowingly. For example, one finishes working at 17:00 and goes to bed at 22:00. Supposed that 4 hours spent on dinner, chores, and such, you will most likely spend the left 1 hour while swiping your phone.

    In addition, successive and long work hour has a positive impact on productivity. With admitted work hours, People can arrange their time freely to achieve complicated and challenging tasks which take time but respond with high rewards. Conversely, in terms of short work hours, the advantage is lost on the account of two potential problems. First, employees have to restart the unfinished work that wastes time and decreases efficiency. Because except for robots getting to work straight away, people need time to focus their minds on work. Secondly, unfinished work causes anxiety to some. To avoid unfinished work hanging over themselves, people will drop tasks that cannot be done within working hours. Consequently, enthusiasm for work becomes tempered. Then the long-term interests of firms suffer.

    I believe longer work hours with more continuous off-duty hours can promote efficiency and arouse workers’ passion for more meaningful tasks to make the whole society more productive.

    December 3, 2021 at 1:48 pm

    Partial Revision (please fix similar errors, revise whole essay, and resubmit)

    Essay is very wordy and needs to be simplified for clarity.

    malatuzitui
    University: Beijing Forestry University
    Nationality: China
    December 4, 2021 at 2:34 pm

    The amount of working hours is one of the most vital factors affecting efficiency. Some argue shorter work hours are more worker-friendly. However, I prefer long work hours as a result of continuous off-duty hours and high efficiency.

    With the same total working hours, concentrated working hours mean consecutive days off, resulting in various choices for vacation. Since long trips can be achieved with long off-duty time, you can go for a vacation at the seaside or hike with your family and friends. All those activities create precious memories that refresh the dazed mind after working long hours. On the contrary, everyday commute splits block time into fragments susceptible to waste unknowingly. Because those bits of time seem too short to do meaningful things. For example, One has 5 hours after work. Supposed that 4 hours spent on dinner, chores, and such, the left an hour is not enough for hanging out with friends nor having a part-time study. Then it will most likely be spent on swiping phones.

    In addition, successive and long work hours have a positive impact on productivity. With admitted work hours, People can arrange their time freely to achieve complicated and challenging tasks which take time but respond with high rewards. Conversely, in terms of short work hours, there is no advantage on the account of two potential problems. Firstly, employees have to restart the unfinished work. Because except for robots getting to work straight away, people need time to focus their minds on work. Admittedly, the process of reopening wastes time and decreases efficiency. Secondly, unfinished work causes anxiety to some. Those tasks that remained on the to-do lists are unsettling especially when they pop into mind during a carefree vacation. Therefore, to avoid unfinished work hanging over themselves, people drop tasks that cannot be done within working hours. Consequently, enthusiasm for work becomes tempered. Then the long-term interests of firms suffer.

    malatuzitui
    University: Beijing Forestry University
    Nationality: China
    December 4, 2021 at 2:35 pm

    P4:

    I believe longer work hours with more continuous off-duty hours can promote efficiency and arouse workers’ passion for more meaningful tasks to make society more productive.

    December 4, 2021 at 5:27 pm

    The amount of working hours is one of the most vital factors affecting efficiency. Some argue shorter work hours are more worker-friendly. However, I prefer long work hours as a result of continuous off-duty hours and high efficiency.

    With the same total working hours, concentrated working hours mean consecutive days off, resulting in various choices for vacation. Since long trips can be achieved with long off-duty time, you can go for a vacation at the seaside or hike with your family and friends. All those activities create precious memories that refresh the dazed mind after working long hours. On the contrary, everyday commute splits block time into fragments susceptible to waste unknowingly. Because those bits of time seem too short to do meaningful things. For example, One has 5 hours after work. Supposed that 4 hours spent on dinner, chores, and such, the left an hour is not enough for hanging out with friends nor having a part-time study. Then it will most likely be spent on swiping phones.

    In addition, successive and long work hours have a positive impact on productivity. With admitted work hours, People can arrange their time freely to achieve complicated and challenging tasks which take time but respond with high rewards. Conversely, in terms of short work hours, there is no advantage on the account of two potential problems. Firstly, employees have to restart the unfinished work. Because except for robots getting to work straight away, people need time to focus their minds on work. Admittedly, the process of reopening wastes time and decreases efficiency. Secondly, unfinished work causes anxiety to some. Those tasks that remained on the to-do lists are unsettling especially when they pop into mind during a carefree vacation. Therefore, to avoid unfinished work hanging over themselves, people drop tasks that cannot be done within working hours. Consequently, enthusiasm for work becomes tempered. Then the long-term interests of firms suffer.

    December 4, 2021 at 5:30 pm

    I have sent screenshot reviews. Fix errors (underlined in purple); change passive sentences into active; restrict each paragraph to 90 words.

    malatuzitui
    University: Beijing Forestry University
    Nationality: China
    December 5, 2021 at 2:26 am

    The amount of working hours is one of the most vital factors affecting efficiency. Some argue shorter work hours are more worker-friendly. However, I prefer long work hours because of the following continuous off-duty hours and high efficiency.

    With the same total working hours, concentrated working hours mean consecutive days off, resulting in various choices for vacation. Since long trips are accessible with long off-duty time, you can go on vacation at the seaside or hike with your family and friends. Those activities create precious memories that refresh the dazed mind after working long hours. On the contrary, everyday commute splits block time into fragments susceptible to waste unknowingly. Because those bits of time seem too short to do decent things. For example, One has 5 hours after work. Supposed that 4 hours spent on dinner, chores, and such, the left an hour is not enough for hanging out with friends nor having a part-time study. Then it will most likely be spent on swiping phones.

    In addition, successive long work hours contribute to productivity. With long work hours, People can arrange their time freely to achieve complicated and challenging tasks which take time but respond with high rewards.

    Conversely, in terms of short work hours, productivity decreases on account of two potential problems. Firstly, employees have to restart the unfinished work. Because except for robots getting to work straight away, people need time to focus their minds on work. Admittedly, the process of reopening wastes time and decreases efficiency. Secondly, unfinished work causes anxiety to some. Those tasks that remained on the to-do lists are unsettling especially when they pop into mind during a carefree vacation. Therefore, to avoid unfinished work hanging over themselves, people drop tasks that cannot be done within working hours. Consequently, enthusiasm for work becomes tempered. Then the long-term interests of firms suffer.

    I believe longer work hours with more continuous off-duty hours can promote efficiency and arouse workers’ passion for more meaningful tasks to make society more productive.

    • This reply was modified 3 days, 16 hours ago by malatuzitui.
    December 6, 2021 at 10:13 am

    The amount of working hours is one of the most vital factors affecting worker efficiency. Some argue shorter work hours are more worker-friendly. However, I prefer long work hours because of the following continuous off-duty hours and high efficiency (you are more efficient and can take long vacation breaks).

    With the same total working hours, concentrated working hours mean consecutive days off, resulting in various choices for vacation (sentence needs to be rewritten, unclear)Since long trips are accessible with long off-duty time (With more time off you can reach destinations further away), so you can go on vacation at the seaside or hike with your family and friends. Those activities create precious memories that refresh the dazed (delete) mind after working long hours. On the contrary, an everyday commute splits block time into fragments susceptible to waste unknowingly (adds to your work hours, so if you can work the same amount of hours in fewer days then you can also get time back). Because those bits of time seem too short to do decent things. (delete) For example, One (one) has 5 hours after work. Supposed that (with) 4 hours spent on dinner, chores, and such (and chores), the left an (remaining) hour is not enough for hanging out with friends nor (or) having a part-time study. Then it will most likely be spent on swiping phones. (delete)

    In addition, successive long work hours contribute to productivity. With long work hours, People can arrange their time freely to achieve complicated and challenging tasks which take time but respond with (result in) high rewards. (this paragraph lacks detail)

    Conversely, in terms of short work hours, productivity decreases on account of two potential problems. Firstly, employees have to restart the unfinished work. Because except for robots getting to work straight away, (delete) people need time to focus their minds on work (combine two previous sentences into one). Admittedly, the process of reopening (restarting work) wastes time and decreases efficiency. Secondly, unfinished work causes anxiety to some (can cause anxiety)Those (delete) tasks that remained on the (delete) to-do lists are unsettling especially when they pop into mind during a carefree vacation. Therefore, to avoid unfinished work hanging over themselves, people drop tasks that cannot be done within working hours. Consequently, enthusiasm for work becomes tempered. Then the long-term interests of firms suffer. (combine two previous sentences into one)

    I believe longer work hours with more continuous off-duty hours can promote efficiency and arouse workers’ passion for more meaningful tasks to make society more productive.

    December 6, 2021 at 10:13 am

    Final revision

    malatuzitui
    University: Beijing Forestry University
    Nationality: China
    December 7, 2021 at 4:29 am

    The amount of working hours is one of the most vital factors affecting worker efficiency. Some argue shorter work hours are more worker-friendly. However, I prefer long work hours because you are more efficient and can take long vacation breaks.

    Given the same total working hours, concentrating work time on fewer days means longer and more consecutive rest periods. With more time off you can reach destinations further away. For instance, you can go on vacation at the seaside or hike with your family and friends. Those activities create precious memories that enhance relationships and refresh the mind after working long hours. On the contrary, an everyday commute adds to your work hours, so if you can work the same amount of hours in fewer days then you can also get time back.  For example, one has 5 hours after work. Supposed that with 4 hours spent on dinner and chores, the remaining hour is not enough for hanging out with friends or having a part-time study.

    In addition, successive long work hours contribute to productivity. With long work hours, people can arrange their time freely to complete complicated tasks which take time but result in high rewards. Take writing, for example, we need a continuous logical line without interruption. Once the chain is cut, the passage might be ambiguous as a result of disconnected logic.

    Conversely, in terms of short work hours, productivity decreases on account of two potential problems. Firstly, people need time to focus their minds when restarting the unfinished work. Admittedly, restarting work wastes time and decreases efficiency. Secondly, unfinished work can cause anxiety. Tasks that remained on the to-do lists are unsettling especially when they pop into mind during a carefree vacation. Therefore, to avoid unfinished work hanging over themselves, people drop tasks that cannot be done within working hours. Consequently, enthusiasm for work becomes tempered so that the long-term interests of firms suffer.

    I believe longer work hours with more continuous off-duty hours not only improve workers’ life but also promote efficiency and arouse workers’ passion for more meaningful tasks to make society more productive.

    • This reply was modified 1 day, 14 hours ago by malatuzitui.