TPO49 Integrated Writing: Like many creatures, humpback whales migrate long distances for feeding and mating purposes.
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November 6, 2019 at 1:46 pm
TPO49 Integrated Writing: Like many creatures, humpback whales migrate long distances for feeding and mating purposes.
The reading passage and the listening part both discuss how humpback whales can migrate long distance but not losing. The passage points out that they rely on stars, and shows three reasons to support this idea. However, the professor in the lecture totally disagrees with this statement.
First, the reading part suggests that humpback whales are of intelligence to guide directions by using stars, because they have complex brains. On the contrary, the professor says that there are also some other animals can use stars to navigate by, such as ducks, whose intelligence is about on average. Thus, using stars to guide directions may be born with and has nothing to do with intelligence.
Second, the reading shows that whales can migrate in straight lines because of using stars as oriental objects. But the lecture claims the Earth’s magnetic flied helps humpback whales navigate in straight lines instead of stars. According to the research result, humpback whales’ brains have biomagnetite which can use magnetic flied to create some feels to orient them.
Third, the passage says that humpback whales sometimes will make their heads above the water to look for stars, which is called spy-hopping. But the professor points out that even though this activity is rare, sharks will also perform like that. Sharks use it to hurt animals, however, rather than looking star or migrating. Meanwhile, humpback whales will spy hop during the day, when have no stars in the sky. So, under these situations, humpback whales use stars just for speculation.
November 6, 2019 at 9:38 pmScore: Ungraded.
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- Numerous grammatical errors.
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November 10, 2019 at 12:11 pmThe reading passage and the listening part both discuss how humpback whales can migrate a long distance but not losing. The author in the reading part points out that they rely on stars, and shows three reasons to support this idea. However, the professor in the lecture disagrees with this statement.
First, the reading part suggests that humpback whales are of intelligence to guide directions by using stars because they have complex brains. On the contrary, the professor says that there are also some other animals can use stars to navigate by, such as ducks, whose intelligence is about on average. Thus, using stars to guide directions may be born with and has nothing to do with smarts.
Second, the reading shows that whales can migrate in straight lines because of using stars as oriental objects. But the lecture claims the Earth’s magnetic field helps humpback whales navigate in straight lines instead of stars. According to the research result, humpback whales’ brains have biomagnetite, which can use magnetic field to create some feels to orient them.
Third, the passage says that humpback whales sometimes will make their heads above the water to look for stars, which is called spy-hopping. But the professor points out that even though this activity is rare, sharks will also perform like that. Sharks use it to hurt animals, however, rather than looking star or migrating. Meanwhile, humpback whales will spy hop during the day when has no stars in the sky. So, under these situations, humpback whales use stars just for speculation.
November 11, 2019 at 2:42 amThe reading passage and the listening part both discuss how humpback whales can migrate a long distance but not losing [Incomplete ]. The author in the reading part points out that they rely on stars, [ grammatical error ]and shows three reasons to support this idea. However, the professor in the lecture disagrees with this statement.
First, the reading part suggests that humpback whales are of intelligence[redundant ] to guide directions by using stars because they have complex brains. On the contrary, the professor says that there are also some other animals [ grammatical error]can use stars to navigate by[wrong use of preposition ], such as ducks[wrong position ], whose intelligence is about on average[ redundant]. Thus, using stars to guide directions may be born with and has nothing to do with smarts.[ confusing ]
Second, the reading shows that whales can migrate in straight lines because of using stars as oriental objects.[ confusing] But the lecture claims [ pronoun issue ]the Earth’s magnetic field helps humpback whales navigate in straight lines instead of stars.[ confusing ]According to the research result, humpback whales’ brains have biomagnetite,[ wrong spelling] which can use [ article error]magnetic field to create some feels to orient them.
Third, the passage says that humpback whales sometimes will [ grammatical error ]make their heads above the water to look for stars, which is called spy-hopping. But the professor points out that even though this activity is rare, sharks will [ tense error ]also perform like that[ unclear]. Sharks use it[ unclear pronoun ] to hurt animals, however, rather than looking star or migrating.[grammatical error ] Meanwhile, humpback whales will [ tense error]spy hop during the day when [grammatical error ]has no stars in the sky. So, under these situations, humpback whales use stars just for speculation.
