Many people believe that social networking sites (like Facebook) have had a negative impact on individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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  • mouruimmm
    University: 武汉理工大学
    Nationality: 中国
    January 12, 2021 at 1:38 am

    Many people believe that social networking sites (like Facebook) have had a negative impact on individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

    With wide using of social networking sites around the world,these sites give us a opportunity to   communicate with each other online.Thus I disagree with this statement.

    The main benefit of using social networking sites to socialize is that it can boost the efficiency of communication.This can help us save plenty of time so that we can have more time on other things.The secondary advantage of this is that it plays an important role in culture spreading,which can promote social development.Specifically,we will have a great chance to share our culture and fun customs while meeting foreigners.Also,another benefit of this is that can find many novel things communicating with others .This means that we can get the latest anecdotes across the country.

    For other hand,this may brings about private information exposure.It is likely to let our secret out when we communicate with strangers,such as facebook password.In addition,we will feel uncomfortable if we use computer or phone for a long time,which may causes a set of physical illness, such as eye fatigue.besides,there is a passive impact on social ability.In essence,our social ability may degrade after staying online for a long time.As a result,it may impede us to socialize face to face.Similarly,the whole society will be influenced on account of this.

    To sum up,although using social networking sites for long time has a negative impact on individuals and society,it is of great significance to our daily life as long as we use it properly.

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    University: University of Wisconsin
    January 12, 2021 at 7:05 pm

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