Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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  • Alex Chris Zhang
    University: Nanjing university of Posts and Telecommunications
    Nationality: China
    July 8, 2020 at 2:47 pm

    Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

    Nowadays, more and more people prefer to work for themselves rather than be employed by enterprises. Some reasons are blamed for this phenomenon and I think it may also brought some disadvantages.

    There are several reasons why people make a living by self-employment. From a political view of point, in order to create jobs, some governments would motivate some youth to start a business and investment. Take an example of Chinese governments, they usually subsidize some small companies and produce friendly policy toward pioneers. In addition, flexible patterns of work and regulation of time may also be a priority to personal consideration about their employment. People who enjoying working from home can obtain more job satisfaction and a good working environment instead of complex working relationships and crowned offices. Finally, working and paying for themselves may improve motivation and practice and sharpen their skills because they often need to address with various problems by themselves.

    However, we cannot neglect the disadvantages of the decision. In the first place, the increasing population who want to go freelance are likely to suffer from unsteady incomes and jobs in comparison with these that office workers, which means that they may have difficulties in meeting a basic demand such as food, accommodation and entertainment. Furthermore, as an employee, companies can provide them for welfare or subsidy to raise levels and quality of life. If people drop out of the companies, they would lose the profits. Finally, self-employees need to regulate worktime and manage money by themselves, it seems to them that they should be cautious about whatever decisions they have made and keep a balance between work and life.

    In conclusion, while self-employees usually have their own motivations to pursue their dreamy life, there are still challenging and risky for them behaviors.

    July 8, 2020 at 9:34 pm

    Score: 51.3

    Issues:

    1. About 50% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. About 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    Alex Chris Zhang
    University: Nanjing university of Posts and Telecommunications
    Nationality: China
    July 9, 2020 at 2:32 pm

    Nowadays, people prefer to work for themselves rather than be employed by enterprises. There can be several reasons why this is the case, and the issue may bring some disadvantages and problems.

    There are several reasons why some people choose to work as freelancers. Firstly, governments tend to motivate young adults to start a business or take more flexible means to create jobs. For example, Chinese governments usually reduce financial burdens on small companies by tax system or bank loans. Secondly, people who work from home avoid rush-hour traffic, so they can have more leisure time to enjoy their lives. In this case, they would get a balance between lives and work, and obtain job satisfaction. Finally, many self-employees would get more practical training and improve problem-solving skills because they have to deal with more difficulties by themselves.

    On the other hand, it is noticeable that developments may not be extremely positive. In the first place, as for salary, a wide range of self-employees would often rely on unsteady incomes to support themselves. It means that they are likely to take cost reduction measures to meet ends meet, and even suffer from risks of bankrupt. If people work for companies, they would obtain a satisfactory welfares and live comfortably. Also, compared with environment for freelancers, the atmosphere in enterprises may make people focus on jobs and get a sense of belonging.

    In conclusion, while self-employment play an important role in society, we should be cautious with its negative impacts.

    July 10, 2020 at 9:19 pm

    Nowadays, people prefer to work for themselves rather than be employed by enterprises[ absolute statement ]. There can be several reasons why this is the case[ duplication from the topic/use your own words ], and the issue may bring some (disadvantages and problems)[redundancy  ].

    There are several reasons[repetition  ] why some people choose to work as freelancers. Firstly, governments tend to motivate young adults to start a business or take more flexible means( to create jobs)[ logically unclear ]. For example, (Chinese governments)[unclear  ] usually reduce financial burdens on small companies (by tax system or bank loans)[ unclear ]. Secondly, (people who work from home avoid rush-hour traffic)[ logically unclear ], so they can have more leisure time to enjoy their lives. In this case, they would get a balance between lives and work, and obtain[ grammatical error/check how to use comma concerning coordinating words ] job satisfaction. Finally, many (self-employees)[word form error  ] would get more practical training and improve problem-solving skills because they have to deal with more difficulties by themselves.

    On the other hand, it is noticeable that (developments may not be extremely positive)[ logically unclear ]. In the first place, as for salary, a wide range of self-employees would often rely on unsteady incomes[word form error  ] to support themselves. It means that they are likely to take cost reduction measures to meet ends meet, and [grammatical error concerning the use of coordinating words  ]even suffer from risks of bankrupt[ word form error ]. (If people work for companies, they would obtain)[ grammatical error concerning use of subjunctive voice ] a satisfactory welfares [noun error  ]and live comfortably. Also, compared with[ article error ] environment[logically unclear  ] for freelancers, the atmosphere in enterprises may make people focus on jobs and get a sense of belonging.

    In conclusion, while self-employment play [ grammatical error ]an important role in society, we should be cautious with its negative impacts.

    Alex Chris Zhang
    University: Nanjing university of Posts and Telecommunications
    Nationality: China
    July 12, 2020 at 3:43 am

    Nowadays, increasing amount of people prefer to work for themselves rather than be employed by enterprises. The issue can be explained by several reasons and it may bring some disadvantages.

    On the one hand, I understand why some people choose to work as freelancers. Firstly, governments tend to motivate young adults to start a business or take more flexible means to get jobs. For example, tax administrations and banks usually reduce financial burdens on small companies by imposing little tax and providing loans. Secondly, people who work from home avoid commuting to workplaces, so they can have more leisure time to enjoy their lives. In this case, they would get a balance between lives and work and obtain job satisfaction. Finally, many freelancers would get more practical training and improve problem-solving skills because they have to deal with more difficulties by themselves.

    On the other hand, it is noticeable that we cannot ignore realistic problems caused by self-employment. In the first place, as for salary, a wide range of self-employed people would often rely on unsteady incomes to support themselves. It means that they are likely to take cost reduction measures to meet ends meet and even suffer from risks of bankruptcy. If people work for companies, they will obtain satisfactory welfares and live comfortably. Also, compared with the working environment where being relaxed for freelancers at home, the atmosphere in enterprises may make people focus on jobs and get a sense of belonging.

    In conclusion, while self-employment plays an important role in society, we should be cautious with its negative impacts.

    July 15, 2020 at 3:47 pm

    Score: 60.3

    Issues:

    1. About 35% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. About 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
    3. Specify the reasons in the introductory paragraph.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    Alex Chris Zhang
    University: Nanjing university of Posts and Telecommunications
    Nationality: China
    August 22, 2020 at 7:47 am

    Nowadays, increasing amount of people tend to work for themselves instead of being a commuter. Free atmosphere and flexible working styles stimulate they to make this choice. However, the trend may cause some disadvantages.

    On the one hand, I understand why some people choose to work as freelancers. Firstly, governments need to create jobs by motivating young adults to start a business. For example, banks usually reduce financial burdens on small companies by providing free-interest loans. Also, employment department can organize vocational training to give instructions to young managers. In this case, they are able to improve problem-solving skills and deal with difficulties more proficiently. Furthermore, people who work from home can spare more commuting time to enjoy their lives. Noticeably, compared with corporative staffs, they can balance work and family commitment better and obtain more job satisfaction.

    However, the tendency may bring some realistic problems. In the first place, as for salary, a wide range of self-employed people often have no enough incomes to support themselves. To save operating cost, they usually take a great variety of measures to meet ends meet. It means that they are likely to suffer from financial issues even bankruptcy. If people work for companies, they will enjoy satisfactory welfares and a quality life. Also, people may be affected by noise due to children’s playing. Conversely, the atmosphere in enterprises may make people focus on jobs and improve working efficiency.

    In conclusion, while self-employment do increases employment rate, we cannot neglect its negative impacts.

    August 24, 2020 at 2:37 am

    Nowadays, increasing amount [grammatical error  ]of people tend to work for themselves instead of being a commuter[unclear  ]. Free atmosphere[unclear  ] and flexible working styles stimulate they [grammatical error  ]to make this choice. However, the trend may cause[wrong word  ] some disadvantages.

    On the one hand, I understand why some people choose to work as freelancers. Firstly, governments need to create jobs by motivating young adults to start a business. For example, banks usually reduce financial burdens on small companies by providing free-interest loans. Also, employment department can organize vocational training to give instructions to young managers. In this case, they are able to improve problem-solving skills and deal with difficulties more proficiently. Furthermore, people who work from home can spare more commuting time to enjoy their lives. Noticeably, compared with corporative staffs, they can balance work and family commitment better and obtain more job satisfaction.

    However, the tendency may bring some realistic problems. In the first place, as for salary, a wide range of self-employed people often have no enough incomes to support themselves. To save operating cost, they usually take a great variety of measures to meet ends meet. It means that they are likely to suffer from financial issues even bankruptcy. If people work for companies, they will enjoy satisfactory welfares and a quality life. Also, people may be affected by noise due to children’s playing. Conversely, the atmosphere in enterprises may make people focus on jobs and improve working efficiency.

    In conclusion, while self-employment do increases employment rate, we cannot neglect its negative impacts.

    August 24, 2020 at 2:39 am

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