Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
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November 27, 2019 at 2:49 pm
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, with technology grows quickly, we have more chance being exposed to movies and television. Someone hold the pespective that this change will affects young people in a negative way. However, I vote against this opinion and steadily stand in the aspect that movies and television influence the young more in a positive way.
Since we watching movies and television which always have characteristics and plots, many super stars arises in films, soap operas and so on. Sometimes we favor people that actors or actresses act because of the similar experiece that expressed by this image. And sometimes we fan the fantastic qualities that actors and actresses themselve own. All of us can achieve some mental relief from either virtual person who is acted or the true and attractive super star. If guided correctly, we ourselve can then become a better one slowly. That’s how movies and television affect young people positively.
Beside the image expressed on movies or televison, the plots in them can both have positive effects on young people. Recently, there is a new movie called ‘ teenagers us ‘ which has raised a large scale of attention being paid to school violence. Not only the characters but also the story touched so many people in our society including young people. It has arisen our notice to the harm to teenagers resulted from school violence. Most of us have schoolmates and we don’t konw whether this violence would happen around us or exactly on us. So we immediately appeal to the society take actions to prevent it. Young people in this kind atmosphere will have a good tendency to treat others with true hearts. These movies and television just positively guide young people .
The relative point which affect young people negatively is not the movies or television themselves, but the way how we, around the young, guide them.
November 28, 2019 at 9:55 pmScore: Ungraded
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December 4, 2019 at 8:38 pmYour revised essay?
December 5, 2019 at 2:09 pmNowadays, with technology overgrows, we have more access to movies and television. Someone holds the perspective that this change will affect young people in a negative way. However, I vote against this opinion and steadily stand in the aspect that movies and television influence the young more in a positive way.
Because movies and television have characters and plots, film stars relatively arise. Sometimes we favor people that actors or actresses act because of the similar experience expressed by this image. And sometimes we fan the fantastic qualities that actors and actresses themselves own. All of us can achieve some mental relief from either a virtual character or an attractive star. If guided correctly, we ourselves can then become a better one slowly. That’s how movies and television affect young people positively.
Besides the image expressed in movies or television, the plots in them can both have positive effects on young people. Recently, there is a new movie called ‘Better Days’, which has raised a large scale of attention to campus violence. Not only the characters but also the story touched so many people in our society, including young people. Most of us have schoolmates, so we don’t know whether this violence would happen around us or exactly on us. As a periodic result, we call on society to take actions to prevent it. Young people in this friendly atmosphere will have a tendency to treat others with sincere hearts. In summary, these movies and television guide young people positively.
As a whole, a film is just a film. It can’t teach one person anything. The most important point is not movies or television themselves, but the guidance to the young from people around them.That’s the true impact.
December 19, 2019 at 7:28 pmScore: Ungraded
Nowadays, with technology overgrows [grammatical error ], we have more access to movies and television [ logical confusion ]. Someone holds the perspective [ redundant ] that this change will affect young people in a negative way. However, I vote against this opinion and steadily stand in the aspect [ unclear]that movies and television influence the young more [ wrong use of adverb ] in a positive way.
Because movies and television have characters and plots, film stars relatively arise [ unclear ]. Sometimes we favor people that [ grammatical error ] actors or actresses act because of the similar experience expressed by this image [ unclear]. [ punctuation error with coordinating word ]And sometimes we fan [ incorrect word ] the fantastic qualities that actors and actresses themselves own. All of us can achieve some mental relief from either a virtual character or an attractive star. If guided correctly, we ourselves can then become a better one [unclear pronoun ]slowly. That’s how movies and television affect young people positively.
Besides [ punctuation error ]the image expressed in movies or television, the plots in them [ unclear pronoun]can both have positive effects on young people. Recently, there is [grammatical error ]a new movie called ‘Better Days’, which has raised a large scale of attention to campus violence. Not only the characters but also the story touched so [ wrong use of adverb ]many people in our society, including young people. Most of us have schoolmates, so we don’t know whether this violence would happen around us or exactly on us. As a periodic result [unclear ], we call on society to take actions [ word form error ]to prevent it [ unclear pronoun ]. Young people in this friendly atmosphere will have a tendency to treat others with sincere hearts. In summary, these movies and television guide young people positively.
As a whole, a film is just a film. It can’t teach one [wrong word ] person anything. The most important point is not movies or television themselves, [ punctuation error ] but the guidance to the young from people around them.That’s the true impact.
