Movies and TV programs made in your country are more interesting than movies and TV programs in other countries.

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It is true that people [  People]have different priorities [ preferences ]when it comes to their preferable [ in terms of ]movies and TV programs. For some [Some  ]people, [ like ]movies and TV programs that made in their own country are top choice. However, I opt for foreign films and TV programs [since many of them are both entertaining and inspiring  ]. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay. First, foreign movies especially American movies can be very thrilling and vivid. Second, I can learn something from foreign TV programs.

For one thing, I can immerse myself in a cinematic experience while watching a movie that made in Hollywood. Since most American films have a huge scene of explosion and chase. This is an exciting way I want to experience since I could reach to things happening on the screen. Besides, if I see a movie with a tragic finale, I will burst into tears after a catastrophic scene. For instance, the lead actress or actor die in a ship wreck like the movie Titanic. Nevertheless, as for similar Chinese movies, I may laugh in that the flamboyant acting skills of Chinese actors. What I need to propose is that I am fond of Marvel movies and transforms that why I opt for films made in Hollywood.

Additionally,  I can glean knowledge by watching foreign TV programs. I may trace the culture behind one’s plots.We all know that learning English is a current hot trend in the world. And in this way, I can improve my English comprehensive skills in an apparently smooth way. For example, when I watched a TV program called The Big Bang Theory, I learned a phrase which was spoken by Sheldon Lee Cooper was: You play your cards right. And this sentence means that you need to behave well.

All in all, when I have spare time to watch a movie or TV program, I will always prioritize foreign movies and TV programs.